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Sweet sweat (by bsquirrel and Anvrill)
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Sweet sweat (by bsquirrel and Anvrill) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Finally Lori and I have gotten our act together and written a poem. It's been a while since our last. We miss each other lots. Mike Sweet sweat The sweat of your aching body covers me in soft sweet waves. Trembling together in search of comfort, knowing completion only in each other's arms. I want to know the moments of your breath's desire. Want to see our songs in heavy-lidded eyes. Want to feel my mouth opening your mouth. I want to know my touch in you. I want to know your touch in me. I want to be complete. It's you who makes me whole. Caress and shiver and fall together; unbound passions. Oh, break my heart so together we can gather up the pieces. I have no need for desperation; just the need of aching whole. I have no need of ministrations; just lie here, darling, against the door. Shh. Lie here with me on the floor. Where did you go? It's cold in window spills. The tracing bloom of searchlight headlights. The passing of cars. Come back to me. Write me in your words. Take me to your star. For without you, the night sky is dark and endless. Without your touch, my body waits. There are fears that can never be defined until I feel a piece of you slipping away. So hold close, the conjoined trembling of us, and breathe your poetry to me. Hold close, my sad lover, and share your sorrows with me. In every touch and moment and breath, I lose myself in your soft hands. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
tiptoeing away... I didn't see much! this was deeper than a duet, you two I was wondering if it would happen thank you brian I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
 Are you entirely sure you posted this'n in the right forum, lovely?i'll be waiting for you |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Nope, but I don't think it's explicit ... just full of a longing ache. And I've seen things posted here that I was surprised were able to stay. In short, I like this little poem where it is. Let's hope others do, too. I love you, babygrrl. *kiss* Mikhail |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank *you*, brian. I like when you stop by. |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very beautiful.... enjoyed very much.... DeaDiAmore |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, DDA. |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
this certainly captures the "ache"! wow, this is great...........! |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
hmm hmm.. (nudge nudge) it is true. in all of my life, i have never experienced anything that felt even remotely more complete than those precious moments in the arms of a loved one |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
'ache' is such an understandment!! beatifully woven!! woah..is all I can say..I guess it does exist doesn't it!? and not just only in faerie tales *sigh*Kristen |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ok, OK Get a room, you two! (actually, I think you will find the santuary fairly quiet) Great job, been wonderin' on thw "when" of it. ~Ed In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I understand this feeling so very well, being a newlywed. Before we lived together, David lived in Indiana and we only saw each other on weekends...and oh that sweet ache, you two describe it so very very well... Thanks for posting it here.....  ~ friendly rodent hugs with offerings of acornsLyra |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
At least the angst of distance makes for good poetry, hm? Thank you all for reading and appreciating. This poem was an impulse that almost died, but luckily didn't. If that made any sense whatsoever. And I find it very cool that by replying to a poem I've co-written, it gets bumped back up to the top again.  Dude.i'll be waiting for you |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks everyone! And Lori, use your newfound power for good. For goooood!  |
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