Open Poetry #22 |
BLUE CRUSH |
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
BLUE CRUSH Waiting for my sweetheart on the tropical shore. She's the only one I love and adore. Here she comes now she's running towards me. We hug and we kiss down by the sea. We strip down to our suits and then we plunge in. Just me and my sweetheart enjoying a warm ocean swim. We pause and I pull her real close to me. We watch the romantic sunset in Waikiki. And on the North Shore blue crush surfer girls prepare their boards to ride the Pipeline's sweet curls. JamesLee August20 2002 |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Sounds like alot of fun to me James. I enjoyed your tale. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you musta seen the movie...inspiration comes from all sources! Nice piece. |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Sigh... this is so romantic!!! Neeraja |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I can just hear Jacques Cousteau narrating this: "See how thee Siffur so eloqueently rides along the keerl of the magnifeecent wave, and yes, there on thee bottom, a great white slowly and maticulousleee removes the siffur's arm. Noteece how the shark roolls around in anxious deeleerium to work heees way down to the meeetie part of the siffur's thigh. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@Toerag! Excellent write James! Great imagery! ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JamesMichael~ A fun-filled delightful read~ Surf's up ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(giggles over Toerag's comment) Oooohhhhh...I love this, this is soooooo beautiful, this remninded me so much of Elvis Presley's "Blue Hawaii" and that lovely song kept playing in my head again and again imagining you and your love holding hands surfing on the Pipeline! (big hugggssssss) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, I love it, I have issed your wonderful words the last few days, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet James, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A sweet and small dip of wave. |
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FLScarlet Junior Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 16 |
Very nice story and you told it very well. I liked the rhyming pace as well.. made it very easy to read. Keep up the good work. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, JM... and Toe's response wiped away the jealousy that was building that you're on Waikiki and I'm in hot humid Houston... at least the sharks here are two-legged. *G* Very nice work. *S* |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
James - very romantic write at the ocean. Swimming there together, very nice... BC |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Water and women...they just seem to naturally go together and I LOVE the swimsuits. LOL! Nice work, James. |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
I am so jealous!! I love this story here! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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