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Standing Echo
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Standing Echo |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{My father would wonder why, as an infant I'd cry so long} Remind me I am the echo a window of time standing at the edge of water because I've grown so beautiful to you in shadows the forest was kept I waited in darkness -- for loving arms soft fingers to dry tears -- No stars tonight I weep for them with one raindrop winter inched between us kept our inner light from touch Wild lilies amidst seas of grass -- our spirit giving oceans blue skies slipping away like changing weather You will sleep many hours here trembling from salt -- your wounds know pain building faith in a ruined house touching fire and water ashes under my feet footprints fragile {years have gone by} I split your image -- how beautiful you were my first encounter of times pictures I wept for you I held what remained I felt loss and pain come forth again I learned to let go long before I loved I flowered, a rose in the rain you are a spirit, I still hear "do not cry, everything will be alright" reminding me I am the echo fragile time standing The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-20-2002 10:41 PM).] |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Wonderful job! This has such a soft feel to it. A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I wept for you I held what remained I felt loss and pain come forth again I learned to let go long before I loved I flowered, a rose in the rain you are a spirit, I still hear "do not cry, everything will be alright"  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Lauren, this is so achingly beautiful, sweet friend, yes, everything will be alright and while when we're young that is hard to understand and difficult to believe time will ease all wounds! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (08-20-2002 09:05 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I wept for you I held what remained I felt loss and pain come forth again I learned to let go long before I loved I flowered, a rose in the rain you are a spirit, I still hear "do not cry, everything will be alright" remind me I am the echo fragile time standing ============================================= Sitting here shaking my head and whispering...'oh yes Lauren'. Fantastic emotional write...excellent. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Because you already knew the passion you would hold as a writer...that's why... he just didn't know they were tears of joy... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Tears of joy and tears of passion... this is such a lovely poem of memories near and far...  ~ hugs and memoriesLyra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ 'I flowered, a rose in the rain you are a spirit, I still hear "do not cry, everything will be alright" remind me I am the echo fragile time standing' Everything you write is tenderly beautiful ... this is no exception ... but it is exceptional~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren each piece that you write is so exquisite and lovely but hon I can feel your pain and your joy all wrapped up in this one. Hugs to you doll.   somebody tell me, please help me.... |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
B E A U T I F U L !!!! I enjoyed this poem so much... with tears in my eyes... Neeraja |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Such lovely musings, Lauren. So much so I must thank YOU for sharing them. Simply beautiful. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, Impressed, a lovely write. |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
You are indeed Echo, the sound made more beautiful. As are these words. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wild lilies amidst seas of grass -- our spirit giving oceans blue skies slipping away like changing weather You will sleep many hours here trembling from salt -- your wounds know pain building faith in a ruined house touching fire and water ashes under my feet footprints fragile {years have gone by} I split your image -- how beautiful you were my first encounter of times pictures I wept for you I held what remained I felt loss and pain come forth again I learned to let go long before I loved I flowered, a rose in the rain you are a spirit, I still hear "do not cry, everything will be alright" reminding me I am the echo fragile time standing ================================ God this is beautiful... so many delicate layers of searching and discovery....so many pieces of you wrapped in exquisite bittersweet images... Not only are you an echo ...but me thinks you are also a beacon of light and you all will now find your way home to one another.  If all the tear drops went to heaven |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lauren this is simply lovely!! Bound for my library. Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
LittleL' Standing you are strong at that. J' |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I feel such longing and loneliness in this, Lauren. Beautifully expressed, my friend. *hugs* |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - another masterpiece from you... BC |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
beautiful.....Library |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Exquisite writing... Hugs2uPoetFriendGreeneyes... *~coco~* |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
starting to stretch a bit, i feel. quote:my favorite gems here. hugs |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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