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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-10-06 01:11 PM


I used to be Republican
and then they stopped my check
so I went down to Social Security
to remind them that I voted
The straight ticket
every time
And? It was a good day there.
There was no one else in line
or even waiting in the chairs.
So I walked up to the sleeping clerk.
She didn’t even open her eyes
but said “you have to take a number”
and I had to tell my self in mind
TWICE to shut my open jaw
that’s how dumbfounded I was
there was no one else around—
I thought for sure it was a joke,
(surely Allen Funt’s around)
But no, she opened eyes to nod
toward a paper roll of print
And so I thought:
“Ooooo-kay, I’ll play”
and ripped the number 86
from its perforation
and walked up proudly with my kill.

But NO--

“wait behind the red line please”
(Oh yeah, it was getting better)
So I played along again.
I stood there with an innocence
painted over my pained face
And then? She put some lotion
on her hands
and never blinked
called, “86!”

And so I won the lottery,
I jumped and screamed,
“YES! That’s ME!”
And turned around to face
no one in the eye
and said,
“It’s my lucky day!”


*     *      *

note: totally true story--oh except for the part about the check...I just threw the Republican bit in to tick off my brother...wicked me

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-06-2002 02:23 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-10-06 01:12 PM



Ah Serene One...there's always that red tape....

and on this end of the line?  One huge grin!

Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2002-10-06 01:28 PM


Grinnin right along with Karilea.....you go get em Karen......love it.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Krawdad
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3 posted 2002-10-06 01:33 PM


too bad there wasn't someone else in line, someone to write about . . .
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4 posted 2002-10-06 02:11 PM


Serenity, I love the way you take  "life" and write so expertly about it. I hate lines, too...sometimes....At other times I like to watch and listen, while I'm waiting. Can learn a lot that way. But, I do hate people to make me "wait in line" whenever there  IS  no line...Thanks

Ethel...garysgirl

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5 posted 2002-10-06 02:20 PM


I should buy a red-striped suit (lots of lines), so no one can ever cross me again without first signing forms in triplicate.

Yep, I'm not making sense. But this poem did. Which is kinda sad, when you think of the subject...

(D)

Martie
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6 posted 2002-10-06 02:38 PM


Thanks for the laugh, Karen...and the commentary...much enjoyed.  Now, I'm off to brave the lines at LAX.  Wish me luck!  
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2002-10-06 02:43 PM


thanks to all--but Krawdaddy? you are so astute--
Dark Angel
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8 posted 2002-10-06 05:41 PM


hahaha excellent stuff m'dear. You crack me up. hugs luscious.

Maree

caterina
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9 posted 2002-10-06 07:48 PM




I loved this, great writing and it gave me some chuckles.  

caterina

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10 posted 2002-10-06 11:52 PM


Believe me, I can just picture you doing that! The only right thing to do when faced with such aggravation is to have some fun with it
ecrivan
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11 posted 2002-10-07 12:13 PM


Allen Funt would have been proud to see you win..enjoyed the humor..continue winning


Kielo
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12 posted 2002-10-07 12:13 PM


(sincerely) I loved this!

Kielo

I need to change my signature. :D

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2002-10-07 03:31 PM


Thank you (curtsy)

you people are wonderful!

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