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Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

0 posted 2002-10-06 01:50 AM

A marvel of perfection was Mishal
That Saturday I walked in stunned mirth
And felt my heart beat like a carnival,
A carnival upon the humid earth.

A marvel of desire was her love
As lance in hand she waved the waiting crowd.
And I surmised it was Brazil that wove
her harmonies and beatitudes aloud.

The writhing of the python,
the Parrot's call,
The draping of the jungle on my frame.
The moisture of the moss upon the walls,
The ruffle of the jaguar's lusty mane.

All these were things I always left unsaid.
Each time that Mishal came into my bed.

[This message has been edited by Radrook (10-06-2002 05:53 AM).]

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-10-06 11:28 AM

Incredible. Enjoyed this very much.

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

2 posted 2002-10-06 12:35 PM

The writhing of the python,
the Parrot's call,
The draping of the jungle on my frame.
The moisture of the moss upon the walls,
The ruffle of the jaguar's lusty mane.

Some wonderful images here Radrook. Can almost hear the Latin Jazz of Stan Getz in the background. Enjoyed.

El riesgo vive siempre!

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

3 posted 2002-10-06 12:48 PM

I agree with Brian, wonderful images. Some strong, passionate words here!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

caterina
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 188
Canada

4 posted 2002-10-06 02:03 PM

Rad, I am so glad your sharing your poetry, you do write beautiful.

You have things going on in this poem that I enjoyed so much and the 3rd stanza seems to stand out for me... although I loved it all.

Thankyou

caterina

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-10-06 02:14 PM

Radrook, you have painted a very realistic picture here. I enjoy reading your work. Thanks,
Ethel.....garysgirl

Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

6 posted 2002-10-06 05:33 PM

Hi!
Thanks to everyone for the encouraging feedback.

I am glad you enjoyed this sonnet.
I wrote this poem twelve years ago.
When I moved to live alone, things got a little disorganized. Somehow my poems got caught in the melee of the divorce and got misplaced.

But after a thorough search, I finally found another small batch in a drawer and this one was included.

I really wasn't too sure about posting it since most poetry today is written in free verse.
But I figured I'd take a chance and post it anyway.

Thanks again!

[This message has been edited by Radrook (10-06-2002 05:45 PM).]

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