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Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

0 posted 2002-08-19 08:19 PM

Stumble of pain, struggle of breath,
postponing,
not
surviving death.

Too many colors on a palette,
changes hue.
Diverse, perverse,
I have no clue.

Marital bliss, dead-heart kiss?
Straight-faced lies multiply to point of drown.
The shrink from embrace.

To rest in bed...
to rest, but not to sleep,
to feel and watch the body weep.

Solitary confinement...
for life.

Which cane, which cane, which cane to use?
Sugar cane?
Walking cane?
Bamboo to climb,
to whip?
How many more lashes must I take?

I saw lightning in bird's nests yesterday.
The eggs,
cooked,
fattened predators of the innocent.
They always do.

A single firefly this year.
How well I could empathize with its plight,
its lonely flight,
as I dripped blood,
scraping barnacles from the hull
of Susan’s Rain.

The ocean mumbled two days ago
until I saw it catch its breath
and SHOUT!
Resting on my side,
I sifted shells
and kept watch
on an empty chair.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2002-08-19 08:33 PM

Michael

I think this is one of your best. I feel like you let go of constrain..and let out the power of your thought, and the emotive feel is very real and touching and strong. Also, the subtle rhyme and rhythm was very well done. Kudos to you, my friend...and a hug!!

[This message has been edited by Martie (08-19-2002 08:34 PM).]

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-08-19 08:35 PM

"A single firefly this year.
How well I could empathize with its plight,
its lonely flight,
as I dripped blood,
scraping barnacles from the hull
of Susan’s Rain.

The ocean mumbled two days ago
until I saw it catch its breath
and SHOUT!
Resting on my side,
I sifted shells
and kept watch
on an empty chair."
=============================================
Michael..this outpouring of feelings reduced me to tears.
Maybe it's just me and the gray day here..
or perhaps..perhaps there is more...
something that I totally undestand.
A fantastic write m'friend.
~Hugs dear poet~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

3 posted 2002-08-19 08:37 PM

A heartfelt write indeed. Well done. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-08-19 08:43 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Michael, this is so powerfully heartaching, this gave me a lonely vision of the sea, I hope everything is alright and the emptiness has disintegrated within! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it and have missed you so much, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (08-19-2002 08:44 PM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2002-08-19 09:17 PM

wonderful writing, Michael..I could feel the pain, the quit wit you have and your perseverance...
Bless you for all you have and are going through..I feel your strength
hugsss
M

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

6 posted 2002-08-19 09:31 PM

The ocean mumbled two days ago
until I saw it catch its breath
and SHOUT!
Resting on my side,
I sifted shells
and kept watch
on an empty chair.

This is simply a delight. Most definately one of your best. Enjoyed the read very much.

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2002-08-21 12:10 PM

I'm bumping this one back up to the top for more to read.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2002-08-21 12:15 PM

And glad I am that Martie bumped this back up. I don't believe I've ever seen this free of verse from you, Michael...its intensity is breath-taking...

and I would see more, when you are so inclined!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2002-08-21 01:56 PM

Michael I dont know that I have ever felt more from a poem before than I have from this one. You are an amazing man my friend. So well done this was. Hugs to you.

somebody tell me, please help me....
understand.......(as sung by Trace Adkins)

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

10 posted 2002-08-21 11:44 PM

My god, this just aches and is so vivid in it's outpour. Michael, sad to say, but, I can relate...and yes, each case is different, I know. You've penned something so unique from your usual style and it's powerful! Yes, this is one of your best.

Take care...email me if ever you need me okay?

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Gabriel Frost
Member

since 2002-08-15

Posts 216
Between midnight thoughts

11 posted 2002-08-21 11:52 PM

Totally connected in mind and spirit.This is such a very well expressed piece.I wish u the best of luck.

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