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The Hanging Man
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The Hanging Man |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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I swirl slowly around the whirlpool looking up watching the retreating rim I don't know how I got here to this place as the raging carries - I fight thrashing toward what appeared to be the sane but inexorable-- the pull and spin down the drain of misunderstand I stopped fighting I craved the black hole of finality I turned upside-down and swam toward it clawing grasping needing it's release ... .. . . fading sight speed....... finding------- I was wrong as I bobbed to the surface to the top of the spiral of life --broken through and through (a new arrangement of soul) I saw I had been upside-down all along |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Interesting read. Enjoyed! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
So did Peter...and I don't understand why HE did either. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Serenity speaks of rocks. You speak of water. You were made for each other; go erode!  (i love yr words, bri) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"finding------- I was wrong" The revelation. "I saw I had been upside-down all along" The reveal. ~Ed |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*chuckles* I especially loved the ending, nicely done! ~Tier  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
but inexorable-- the pull and spin down the drain of misunderstand I stopped fighting I craved the black hole of finality a whirlwind of emotions, powerful words. El riesgo vive siempre! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Brian!! Wow! Exceptional. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
swirl slowly around the whirlpool looking up watching the retreating rim I don't know how I got here to this place as the raging carries - I fight thrashing toward what appeared to be the sane but inexorable-- the pull and spin down the drain of misunderstand ---- All by itself--this is exceptional--you took splotches of emotion and gave them subconscious color and as if this is not enough? no...you draw bridges with the visual presentation. Bri? Look at this yourself..It's twin poems that fit...a poetry orgy? Um...We need to talk... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian Impressed here with the deep way you took this, almost to drowning and then seeing the light. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I just realized you could read the stanzas in reverse order! Was that intentional? You genius, you... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
radrook -- thank you K1st- ow mike1st - Means a lot to me... thank you Ed - BINGO! thanks dude RobinTier -- You bring a smile! Thankyou brian - thank you very much I appreciate that Anne - - you a sweetheart *hug* k2 -- yesyes Now THIS response? YES love you Martie-- very much appreciated thank you for reading it Mike2 -- No, Mike your genius saw that I didn't have a clue Iam Go Write Something You are Go grab an editor by the shoulders and say This is not mere words This is perception captured trapped on wood carved in the initial Tree No it will not sell Hallmark cards but it can change the way the world is seen IT'S CALLED open eyes ------------------------ you all are too kind to me |
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