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Snake Charmer ... Iambe Family Challenge
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Snake Charmer ... Iambe Family Challenge |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
heres the link to Captains challenge request: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000505.html ~~~~~~~~~~~~ thank you Ron...for the inspiration ... most of all for your Iambe series...and the way it makes this moth feel...no one writes her like you.  ~~~~~~~~~ Snake Charmer I'll never forget the first time I laid eyes on Jake, Iambe and Dillion's older brother. He blew in unexpectedly on a sultry summers breeze. Tanned and tattooed ... cowboy hat, blue jeans and boots. He gave off an intensity like a Texas tire fire. He rarely wore more than jeans, that tan and those tattoos. He broke in his Levis like he did the broncs and the women. He never left the rodeo without the prize ... never left the bar without skinned knuckles and the girl on his arm. He was one of the few men I'd ever seen who could look Iambe in the eye and see respect returned. I'll never forget the last time I saw Jake either. Iambe and I walked up on him swimming in the lake, nothing on but that tan. He just stood, strolled up the bank to his clothes, smiling like the rattlesnake tattoo on his backside. He pulled on his boots and jeans, tipped his hat, winked at us and sauntered on down the dirt road. As I watched him walk away ... I remember wishing with a vengeance to be a tattoo in my next life. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
about time you got this posted over here!!! (chuckling) Like your take on Iambe's relatives! Good stuff JM... now can you write him again? Can you build him into his own as a character that you can use? I bet you can! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sheesh, Ron's like Mr. Rogers. LOL Loved this, JM. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What an interesting family...we've got Iambe, Dillon, Jake and Konrad...do you think... never mind... you already did... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thanks Ron... I was hesitant to post this as I have been gone for a couple weeks and havent been able to do many replies...I'm so far behind in here, but I couldnt resist the chance to try and pay tribute to your series that so many of us have come to enjoy so much. As for Jake being a muse.... well what moth can resist a cowboy  thanks Capt. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks Mike..cant wait to see your character  thanks K...now you can call off the dogs LOL |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ron...if she can't 'use' him, I sure can! LOL. Janet Marie~ I'm loving this from you. Love the picture you've painted in words, and gotta love the tan and jeans.  Got me chuckling at the thought of being a tattoo in your next life. You'd be one HAPPY tattoo! LOL. Thanks for sharing this one, poet friend. Hugs,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I love this...Tattoo in your next life? LOL So cute! I'd like to read more about him too.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
JM~Now this is one relative I would love to meet! WOOHOOO! Oh yes....this is great! ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie I love the way you painted this older brother. I wonder how many children will end up in this family? Really good to see you here in open!!  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"He gave off an intensity like a Texas tire fire." "He broke in his Levis like he did the broncs and the women." "As I watched him walk away ... I remember wishing with a vengeance to be a tattoo in my next life." Yeeeeehawwwwwww! I see Ron tickled your muse with inspiration Janet Marie! What a wonderful read ... you had me smiling from the get go, gator gal. I absolutely love those lines above, and what a great ending. You need to write more like this, yes indeedy, you do, you do! Much enjoyed JM ... wonderful to read you. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
hmm yes I agree with Poet deVine..a tattoo in your next life..loved it..pure magic and gold and hehe even better chocolate haha sorry have a thing for chocolate Consider yourself fuzzed [This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-02-2002 07:04 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Have no idea what this is about, but you did a great job. Made me a little jealous. LOL |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Jan, this is different of poetry for you. I can see that the ocean air agreed with your muse. "He gave off an intensity like a Texas tire fire. He broke in his Levis like he did the broncs and the women." "He never left the rodeo without the prize ... never left the bar without skinned knuckles and the girl on his arm. and the last line, a classic "As I watched him walk away ... I remember wishing with a vengeance to be a tattoo in my next life. This is fantastic Eve-a-gator. Keep writing free verse. THis one's a keeper. El riesgo vive siempre! |
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Singing Sparrow Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 94 |
awesome! SS [This message has been edited by Singing Sparrow (10-02-2002 08:54 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, you should post here more often, I just love it when you drop in and suprise us wih your beautiful words! (kiss on cheek) The family grows on and so do your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Well, I'll be...look what the tide brought in! I'm impressed, Jams. Ya did the challenge justice and then some. And free verse, too!! Amazing what a bit of sea spray will do. |
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fishop Member
since 2002-09-13
Posts 79ohio |
thought I was reading about myself. Only I smell like a tire fire. This one put a smile on my face, thanks for sharing. I will have to check out the link. Tom |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hey guys...Ive got storms going on here, but I wanted to thank everyone for these very cool and generous replies... I enjoyed writing for this challenge... I hope some of you who havent discovered this "Iambe" series of Rons will check out the Archives and enjoy them as much as I have...and hopefully some of you will give this challenge a try... DUNCAN...that means you Sybabers...dont be jealous...its all fiction, LOL...and besides...Randy looks mighty fine in his cowboy hat  thank you to ALL for your kind replies and support. "Life" has taken me away from here for awhile...Im still playing catch up and trying to get grounded again. my love and respect to Poetry Land jm |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
whew...seen a few tattoos like that myself ahem.....this is fantastic Janet. Have sooooo missed reading you!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
LOL....thank you Susan ... I just had a feeling you would like this one Sea-girlie thanks to all love, jm |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet baby, you moth you. Got a big smile out of this great write. Gee I always wanted a tattoo of a butterfly or a moth... Parker |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is WONDERFUL---but then--grinning--rumor has it I've got this "thing" for snakes! (methinks I am calm enough to read now...) See? Your muse is not gone luvie, just needed the right inspiration! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
P-man....hey sweet tease...so good to see your name here...and if I put a smile on that darlin face of yours then I must be doing something right So....just where is it youd like that tattoo..the left or right ??? Coming or going?  KA...well you know theres nothing like a tanned cowboy to get a moth riled up ... been watching the news and holding you and yours in thought. love ya me twin...stay high and dry |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
awwww... you'd make such a cute tattoo too! (tattoo too - wow, that's an odd pairing...) hey - uhm, i, uh... noticed something about this poem... struck me right off, and stuck with me straight through... IT DOESN'T RHYME!!! (insert evil, repetitive laughter here). likes it mothy you... the end line is wonderful, packing a punch and sticking to the skin (ok, pun intended) like a last line should. hugs |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hmmm... it's not the sun scorching that lake causing all the steam. *S* You mastered rhyme long ago... now you're getting VERY good at free verse. *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (10-04-2002 04:00 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Forgive me for taking so long to come back to this and thank you two...I had some server troubles off and on for the last few days..... Chris....why am I NOT surprised YOU noticed the lack of rhyme....SO...does that mean you will try rhyming just to show me up ???  thank you poet sir for coming by and peeking at the tats. LOL so glad you enjoyed. ..you can pun me anytime. Ruth-girlie.....thank you so much for your kind compliments...I am enjoying free verse...it doesnt work me mothy muse as hard ..LOL...I was hoping to try and capture the style that Ron does so very well with his "less is more" and imagery... and of course those closing summation lines of impact that he always knocks me out with. I heard you were feeling under the weather...hope youre doing better now... the werk monster will miss you thanks to all for your replies and again to Ron for the inspire. |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
wish i had more time to type, in class right now. so shhh. but i liked this thx for sharing. ahh teach coming got to go :-) There's a peace inside us all |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Hi JM been a long time gone and a long road travelled been everywhere seen a lot but every now and again i need a pit stop and where better than here i am using this poem to send the message great as it is its better for leeting me drop you a line. maybe i e-mail you now im back for a while The very deep did rot: O Christ! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Bae and Walter..thank you for taking the time and effort to find me on back pages...I dont post very often anymore due to a moody muse and time constraints here that take me away from the poetry. Walter..any time you wish to write will be welcomed. thank you both. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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