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Knock knock |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Unexpected, the sound breaks into the comfortable of my reverie, worrying long legged memories that quickly scurry back into the safety of the shadows. Would that I could find a way to end this persistent inquiry but the corridors seem to consider my confusion. Round my ankle a lover’s touch remembered trips me up, my box of scold scatters in the disturbing dust, softly sifting together excuses and remembrances. My goal delayed, I start a quick retrieval, until, my fingers linger sweetly on leftover fondness...but silence that knocking, I must stumble over my mess, crack the door, and blink away the brightness of your determination. A bit wider I open and though I couldn’t say just why, I allow you entrance; suddenly I am more than aware of my disheveled viewpoint. The kindness of your smile catches me off guard and certainly needs not my apology, but the only words that leave my lips are - please excuse the mess... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jellybeans Very good, a delightful read. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"My goal delayed, I start a quick retrieval, until, my fingers linger sweetly on leftover fondness...but silence that knocking, I must" "stumble over my mess, crack the door, and blink away the brightness of your determination." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "The kindness of your smile catches me off guard and certainly needs not my apology, but the only words that leave my lips are - please excuse the mess..." fantastic  love the images, and the memories that it brings to my mind |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
geez.... you can mess up my world anytime... love the poem...love the orginality of presenting this thought and feeling in this way.... always a pleasure my friend..always a pleasure.. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, lady... the scatter of emotions are a perfect compliment to the scramble of feet weaving their way to the door... and just what you need. *S* Round my ankle a lover’s touch remembered trips me up, my box of scold scatters in the disturbing dust, softly sifting together excuses and remembrances. And this??? This verse is simply magic... one to read again and again, just appreciating the pictures you paint with words. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, I have been there--and you described it all so well! My Mom always drilled into my head, "Always be prepared"---meaning, look your best whenever you leave the house, you never know who you're going to meet!---or always keep the house clean, you never know who could drop by! Well, I must admit, I try to always be prepared, but the most embarrassing moment was one that you just described---both me and my place was a mess! But he didn't seem to mind---he just "smiled" and I thought, what the heck! It's the real me he came to see! I enjoyed this very much! Nice to know I haven't been alone in this experience! EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Unexpected, the sound breaks into the comfortable of my reverie, worrying long legged memories that quickly scurry back into the safety of the shadows. I love the long legged memories image here... adds a touch of sensuality and at the same time the image of something that can indeed travel quickly in long steps to dissapear quickly... Round my ankle a lover’s touch remembered trips me up, my box of scold scatters in the disturbing dust, softly sifting together excuses and remembrances. My goal delayed, I start a quick retrieval, until, my fingers linger sweetly on leftover fondness...but silence that knocking, I must lady... this section sends my mind in a spin... and I can attach several meaning to it with not one of them being any less enticing had to revisit... and had to point out the sections I especially enoyed |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
jb...i always rush to read you everytime i see your name...you are one of my favorite authors...you never disappoint me either...helen |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is neatly put together  Nan(Pilgrim variety) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
jellybeans - this is charming and a delight to read... BC |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Seymour thank you SEA, hmmm glad to hear my words bring pleasant memories Cpat thank you, it is a pleasure for you to stop by (twice **smile**)......seems my 'mess' hasn't offended as much as I supposed Suthern, one of mine isn't finished until I hear from you....am glad you liked |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
don't know why PIP made me cut my reply in half, but here goes with the second half... EA, the mess metaphor was to describe the inside of my head, but am glad the metaphor worked for you Cpat.... 1slick lady....thank you...that is such a wonderful compliment..... Pilgrimage....thanks Bill Charles, thank you |
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