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I should have awakened
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I should have awakened |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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I should have awakened To find you beside me Sleeping the sleep Of the ravishing, ravished Arousals’ aromas still Fresh in the air I should have awakened To find you still wanting To rekindle the embers That burned in the night The fever of fervor yet Warming the room I should have awakened To your murmuring purr Your beguiling beseech Of yearning unyielding Regaling reminders Of exalted exclaim I should have awakened Long before now ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Falling headlong into heartbreak (or, realizing the place to where you've fallen), your words still thrill. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
And I should have read you long before now. This is really an incredible poem. Couldn't pick out a line of it 'cause I wish I'd written it all! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
Wranx- Your imagery attuned to every sense here... how could you sleep? *weg* A decoupage hobby? Not unless you were planning to layer her skin with your words. Indigo |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh you said it! I should have awakened to that same thing..alas, not to be. Sandra |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Squirrel dude ~ yeah, this thing is generic enough to work on many levels, it does, however take my penchant for alliteration to a all time high. Duncan ~ thanks much for your praise, means much Seymour ~ Thanks to you as well for the thoughtful reading of it. Indigo ~ "to layer her skin with your words" is a poem in itself. Perhaps you will write a piece with this. Or perhaps post a challenge. BTW, thanks for your kind comment. Sandra ~ You said it best, once or twice, within this forum, but "alas" does nicely. ~wranx [This message has been edited by wranx (08-19-2002 07:47 PM).] |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
wistywranx this one flowed smooth and pure like fine old regret At least you have awakened which is more than some brian I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do not know why, but I think to read this by soft candlelight, on parchment, would make me want to shed a tear... it is very beautiful... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I should have woke up by now as well..but I'm still sleeping!! hrm..lovely, eerie ..but in a good way!  I'm soo not good at this comment thing but perhaps I should try a bit harder I think my muse is being anti-social..Kristen |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wry smile...and? methinks maybe I should have slept... damn. woulda coulda shoulda |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Smooches.....Beautiful Je t'adore Green eyes bleed in blue As tart tears trace crimson lips Tonight I taste love DeaDiAmore |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, very sad. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I have just spent some time reading postings that have passed me by due to my absence or rush...and felt like commenting on all of yours.. I chose instead to comment on this one by saying it is at times as if looking into a mirror when I read your words...and I find the form and structure familiar and an easy digest..though the subject at times may be painful... I know now I am hooked... as I truly like your style and use of word and image to take the reader through the feel, while still presenting enough logic for the other half of our brains to be pre-occupied enough to let us sink into the depths of possibility expressed. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very good write |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
From what I can gather, you are wide awake now, and as they say, "Better late than never!" The next woman in your life will be fortunate indeed, for she'll have a man who is awake on many levels! Wonderful writing as always! Linda |
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caterina Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 188Canada |
Another super poem. I think I'm becoming a wranx follower. I like the way you use your words-- ravishing, ravished arousal's aromas fever of fervor and so on and all the stanzas flow so well. Thankyou for the read, I enjoyed. caterina |
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