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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-09-29 01:46 PM

Floating in gray, stone skies
spread out    to shadows

dark night     falls

I probe dreams with black fingers;
  swim across deeper rivers
landing on   lost shores

Searching for    time    in

half    finished walls
for more peace  --  I  inhale

empty earth  patting the mound

still     I     watch it  crumble

stone by stone, grain by grain--
listen    in     rains evening
tapping--tapping    the windowpains’

                   Shades of blue play:

I remember, we spoke of memories
             your abuse affected my smile
I didn’t know:    I cried in learning, life’s gentle hands

You took her freedom

    batted love in  single strokes
         she loved you, god knows why,
you hated,       {the same breath I still feel}
I want to speak those words, but love
is  greater…..yetdon’t speak softly my name,
I will not listen---my ears deaf  {to you}

      How could you not love us?
How could you  leave ?

         Shades of blue play: tender seasons

My  innocense died, floating past hallways,
echos  of a sun, never rising in the west

staining glass           in

Wednesday's house

~~~~~~

I need some distraction
...oh beautiful release
Memories seep from my veins

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (10-01-2002 10:39 PM).]

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-09-29 01:51 PM

I think your message quote of Plato plays
into this poem well....

Many feelings withing this work....nicely
done Lauren...

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2002-09-29 02:06 PM

I probe dreams with black fingers;
  swim across deeper rivers
landing on   lost shores

Searching for    time    in

half    finished walls
for more peace  --  I  inhale

May peace always be yours my dear friend.  This is a hauntingly beautiful write.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-09-29 02:09 PM

"Shades of blue play: tender seasons

My  innocense died, floating past hallways,
echos  of a sun, never rising in the west

staining glass           in

Wedsendays house"

(big hugggssssss) Oh Lauren, this is soooooo hauntingly beautiful, sweet friend, I can feel the cries of lost innocence here and I hope all is alright now and no more stones are thrown at this stained glass house! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-09-29 02:14 PM

So very very hauntingly penned sweet friend.
You write so beautifully Lauren.
~Hugs dear poetess~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2002-09-29 05:57 PM

Greeneyes - haunting indeed, and written as only you can...

BC

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

6 posted 2002-09-29 11:29 PM

Lauren,
Bless you for looking back. Well done.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2002-09-29 11:53 PM

this has such an impact....made my eyes sting. (((hugs)))

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

8 posted 2002-09-30 08:30 AM

The misspelling of "Wednesday" as "Wedsenday" adds to the child-like innocence of this work.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

JAR
Junior Member

since 2001-11-06

Posts 34

9 posted 2002-10-01 08:07 AM

LittleL'
Shades of blue
play
J'

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

10 posted 2002-10-01 04:11 PM

... indeed, indeed. on the surface, this is a breathtaking collage of painful, bittersweet memories bleeding into loss. but i see something glittering beneath the surface as well, a metaphor for a life extended through your clever phrasings.

this is one i'll have to revisit.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2002-10-01 05:12 PM

nice

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

12 posted 2002-10-01 10:40 PM

I really appreciate you all, and I am so sorry I havent had enough time to come in and thank you personally....thank you all for taking your time to read....

with love and warm regard

Lauren~

I need some distraction
...oh beautiful release
Memories seep from my veins

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

13 posted 2002-10-02 02:33 AM

Lauren,

It's always so nice to find your poems. I don't get to stop in here much anymore, and there are alot of names I don't know.. but your words are always here

Yay for that

Hugs,
Tara

msflame
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

14 posted 2002-10-02 09:46 AM

"I need some distraction
...oh beautiful release
Memories seep from my veins"

these lines are so soft and comforting to read this morniing!

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