»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #22
»
The Eyes Of A Stranger
| Open Poetry #22 |
|
The Eyes Of A Stranger |
|
|
Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia 
|
 I sit here with my feelings As my heart lays on the floor The finality of our love was felt The moment you closed the door My feelings had become superfluous Your love had left without trace Did you feel any remorse As the tears rolled down my face? You left me brokenhearted Pushing my feelings to one side Your heart now loved another There was no room for me inside I search the eyes of a stranger This man who I adored You once loved me without question As together our hearts soared Dark shadows now surround me In my heart there lays a hole You took my reason for living And you crushed my very soul Your masquerade is now over You've made your final curtain call But I will not remain defeated Once again I will walk tall * * * I should say that this is pure fiction and was in no way written from any personal experience. I am in motion |
||
| © Copyright 2002 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
 Well done! I enjoy fiction poetry. Its a little like improv compared to acting. *shrug* Sometimes, anyway. Sometimes improv turns out differently. *shakes head* Sorry, I'm rambling again. At any rate, I liked it! Kielo |
||
|
NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hey Sue, I enjoyed this. A bit different from what you normally write and thankfully it's purely fictional. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
||
Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sue, I'm so glad this is fiction because these thoughts truly are sad and I wish the beauty of true love to always be with you and to be faithful! (kiss on cheek) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
||
|
Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
you write with a sensitivity for feelings though you have no personal experience - wow how well you do it Sue - loved this - Paul |
||
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes SueT.....done well...love the flow of the piece and you certainly tell the feel well..... |
||
|
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suetang - pure fiction or not, it is well told with a lot of feeling... BC |
||
|
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SueTang~ Oh my ... this is simply compelling~ You've woven a tale of hearts that is felt by someone ... somewhere~ WONDERFUL ! And ... I love your 'blue pots'~ I would perhaps like to 'snitch it' for a future write ... if that's okay with you~ Needing to know if it's your photo or someone else's so I can give proper credit if I use it~ Thankee, gal~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
||
|
Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Thank you all for your comments. I really like to put myself in the shoes of others to try and see what it's like and I find it a challenge to do so. Marge - You are more than welcome to use the picture of the blue pots which I took myself. Photography is another of my passions that I seem to have so little time for. You can use any of my pictures, I'd be honoured. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
