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Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

0 posted 2002-09-27 12:46 PM

Matted hair plastered her face
Her black knit cap, well worn
Shoe shells around her ankles
Soles gone, exposing corns

The storefront light her reading lamp
An old brick wall her desk
Late nights, just around the corner
She'd seek the ground for rest

I've seen her life, a tattered pad
Pages dirty and worn thin
Night and day she'd sit there and scribe
Tired dribblings from a cracked pen

She'd talk as if a crowd drew near
Animated laughter and sighs
Sometimes, when you look real close
You see tears in her homeless eyes

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

1 posted 2002-09-27 01:56 AM

That's beautiful. I really loved the image, how descriptive it was. Great emotion attached to this.

Kielo

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

2 posted 2002-09-27 02:04 AM

Hello Kris

I saw this person so very clearly through your words and I was very touched by this.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-09-27 07:37 AM

Kris, Mike is going to appreciate this one so very much! You took a difficult line, and wrapped it up in emotion of humankind...

Bravo!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-09-27 08:16 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Kristopher, this is so very sad but wonderfully written, sweet friend, may this poets words be noticed and may poets like this slowly emerge and find new hope before them! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristopher, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Irie
Senior Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

5 posted 2002-09-27 05:35 PM

OK, my problems have suddenly gone away.
I think it's safe to say you've met your challenge,
and you met it quite well.

Excellent!

~Sheri

"Don't wait for your ship to come in ...
Swim out to it"

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2002-09-27 05:39 PM

Kris, you have penned pure humanity in this one.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-09-27 06:08 PM

Kris,
I have seen her around L.A.,
sadly.

In many faces.

Thanks for this.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2002-09-27 11:28 PM

Whoa...this is exceptional! You've painted a very sad picture. Well done!

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

9 posted 2002-09-28 03:41 PM

Krishankins,

You describe this soul so perfectly. "There but for the grace of god go I"

One of the most touching and best poems I've read lately.

SimplyGold

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