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Hapless
Junior Member
since 2002-09-22
Posts 10
NY, USA

0 posted 2002-09-23 10:04 PM


I peer.
The window, cold and wet against my palm.
The road streaks by.
Heavy metal thrashes in my ears.
I peer,
Oblivious to the chatter around me,
Oblivious to the lovers behind me.
Alone,
I peer.
The seat next to me, empty.
Alone, in my world.
What a lonely world.
I peer.
A tear rolls down my face
And falls to an untouched hand.
The bus moves on,
And I peer.


Thoughts?

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Miah
Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2002-09-23 10:50 PM


Awww, so sad.  I'll ride the bss with ya. lol

I hate to ride the bus anyway.  thanks for the read.  

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
2 posted 2002-09-23 11:33 PM


Sad!!! I know the feeling. Good write

Cold hands means a warm heart

leafseranade
Member
since 2001-07-06
Posts 118
Wisconsin, USA
3 posted 2002-09-25 12:29 PM


I remember riding the bus with such similar feelings it's like I'm back there.  Such a lonely place to be in (in your mind) Good write.
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