Open Poetry #22 |
Always Be Concise |
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My Dad's a man who's to the point, He doesn't mince his words, Senseless prattle wastes his time And gossip's for the birds! He claims that I do ramble on, In a mindless chatter, That I should think, before I speak, And say what really matters! When voicing his opinions, People note what he does say, They know he'll make, each statement count, And not go on all day! Perhaps he's right, for I have found, That I am seldom heard, Oft' times I must repeat myself, A second or a third! It can be disconcerting, To find myself ignored, For people often tune me out Because they're getting bored! When in a conversation, And there comes a sudden lull, I go and fill that silence With anything at all! I guess I really should take stock Of that which I do utter, I shouldn't talk to hear myself, Since I've been known to mutter. So, now I think, before I speak, And follow Dad's advice, "Say what you mean; mean what you say, And always be concise! |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Wonderful write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Fuji Junior Member
since 2002-09-23
Posts 26 |
I absolutely loved it. I feel much the same way about myself and my dad. He's given me the same advise. Your poem carried a nice rhythm. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, I absolutely loved this Earth Angel! Wise, wise words indeed, all wrapped up in a wonderfully rythmic and flowing tale. Very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
From one rambler to another, your Dad's advice is right on.... Good writing, good advice. (I'm trying to be concise!!) Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Julie--- I suppose your hands are quite cold right now, because that was a warm response from your heart! ~ have a great day! ~ EA |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Fuji--- Hello! I see you are new to PIP--welcome! Thank you for your kind reply. I sometimes do, still ramble on though--in my replies! hehe ~ smiles across the miles ~ Earth Angel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Kit--- Your enthusiastic and very complimentary reply has me grinning from ear to ear---It's a great way for me to start my day! Thanx! ~ May you make many pleasant memories this fine fall day ~ Linda |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Marti--- hahaha! --that was funny! The sun is up It's a brand new day So make it a good one In every way! ~ a good morning hug to you! ~ Linda |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very well written and wise too ... regards sudhir |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Linda, this is so very true, sweet friend, my dad tells me the same thing because I have a tendency to be descriptive when I talk and have him think "Will this anecdote ever end?" LOL! This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Linda, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sudhir--- Yes, my Dad is a wise man, and I have tried to be wise as well by following his words of wisdom---unfortunately, I am not always that successful! hehe ~ smiles across the miles ~ EA |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Noah-- Good morning!---although, I'm sure you are probably still sleeping out there in Colorado! Thank you for your warm reply! ~ When you get up, sweet prince---may your day be full of good thoughts and good deeds! --but of course it will, 'cause you're and angel! ~ Linda |
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Paddy Member
since 2002-09-23
Posts 52Straya |
If your dad is right This poetry you would not write Then where would we be Enriched the less I guess one becomes content with one’s poetry when one opens the book ten years hence and does NOT exclaim, “Did I really write this?” |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Paddy-- I loved your poetic reply! tehe If I took the literal meaning of all that my Dad has said to me, I'd be a bit strung out and paranoid! I always listened to his pearls of wisdom, while I was growing up, and I internalized and integrated into my being that which I felt was right for me. I do try to think before I speak--or write! But as you can see from this rambling reply---I ain't perfect! ~ Enjoy your new PIP family! ~ Earth Angel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
When in a conversation, And there comes a sudden lull, I go and fill that silence With anything at all! Linda - So do I !! My husband just looks at me and shakes his head. lol. I really enjoyed this poem. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Chris--- You do that too? Ha Ha! I just can't stand it when there's a lull in a conversation and everyone just stares at each other in a very uncomfortable silence---I still find myself junping in---but instead of just blurting out anything, I do try to think before I speak---well, at least most of the time! hehe ~ Have a super duper day! ~ Linda |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ha ha ha ha! I love that it took you eight stanzas to come to rounding up the reason and point vis a vis the element of your father's advice to you at being non-longwinded, aka concise. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This is truly one of your best gal!!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mike--- Hahahahahaha! That's funny! I guess I still haven't grasped the concept of being concise!----I'm just as long-winded as ever! ~ I hope you have a lovely evening, and a lovely life, and everything goes well for you, and that your pen never dries up on you, and that you experience financial abundance and vibrant good health, and that your dog never has fleas, and that you don't lose your hair---or your sense of humor!.... .........................................................................etc. etc. etc. ~ smiles ~ Linda |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Toe--- Thank you for your resounding approval! Glad you enjoyed! ~ May your toes remain jam free for all the days of your life! ~ tehe Linda |
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