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With Hands the Scent of Twilight (a sonnet)
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With Hands the Scent of Twilight (a sonnet) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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With hands the scent of twilight, she held onto dawn's change of colour. Clouds followed the daylight, hov'ring in their spaceless dolour. She told me at touch of morn that we awed the deadest lights. That galaxies were not starborn, but reflections after sight. She gave me a molecule, a thought in kiss upon my palm. Then we watched shadows unspool, to leave unspoken words in calm. She broke the silence with a question. We went inside, at sky's suggestion. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-20-2002 12:22 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Very good write has usual Mikey. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
"....we awed the deadest lights That galaxies were not starborn, but reflections after sight." I loved this! Beautiful sonnet. Excellent write! [This message has been edited by EarthenSoul (09-20-2002 12:53 PM).] |
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ThunderMage Senior Member
since 2002-06-20
Posts 812Canada |
That was good.  What is life without poetry and adventure? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BSquirrel~ This is totally magnificent ! I'm sharing the link with a true friend-of-Sonnets~ She will so enjoy your thoughts ... as I have done~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Dude...sonnets are not my strong point, just as rhyme in general is not.. can't say if the form is true or the rhyme is forced if the meter a bit off... can say it reads well...and that I enjoyed it. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I'm glad you all enjoyed. And Marge, thank you for sharing it with a friend. That really makes my day. Ron, yes, this form isn't my strong suit. In fact, I'm calling all my poetry into question of late. Me and my moods. Mike |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautifully surrwal, sweet friend, all five senses always reel in your wonderful poetry, I love the whimsical delight of this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done... a dreamy and romantic gem dangled from the chain of hearts. ThisDiamond |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you both. |
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