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Soliliquy II
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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 Soliloquy II My treasure chest was levied indentured to compositions that lay covered in obscurity striving for poetry in motion but tamed into stillness Why is it easier to release the soul on paper than with a repentant voice? I dissected my errors like a surgeon plans drawn with loose limb extremities until gotten right. Write like this:and this, but not like THAT Everyone wants you to become one of 'us' as if that sanctions their elective choices. I think that is the purpose of writing: not expunging, cleansing, but validation. You walk the ends of the earth in a lifetime just to find where the world begins: a place to start. But we are all just cats with water bordering us Paper Tigers Some of learn how to swim some of us . . . don’t Want to see my Lifesaving card? [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (09-19-2002 09:52 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like this. It was very interesting. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love the introspect in this one, Jeff... especially the last verse... But I guess I'd better be on my way, if you are cat....because I am a chipmunk afterall.... without a lifesaving card  ~ swimming hugsLyra |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Jeff, I wish that all of us could swim, sadly it seems many of us get dissolved in this mess of demands and we become uniform to everyone else and are chased away from our own true colors! (sigh) You truly are a lifeguard of wisdom and with words like yours I know you can always influence so many, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So very excellent...paper tigers... Yahuh...SWIM! ThisDiamond |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Is that a picture of "The Thinker"---if so, methinks it reflects that aspect of you. Your work is always thought-provoking and your intelligence shines through. P.S. Now that I've stroked your ego, may I borrow your Lifesaving card some time? hehe ~ May you never have need of that card again-----but keep your credit cards---you can't live without them! hahaha EA |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
I really like this one, for so many reasons. I can't think of one line or phrase that is more predominate over the other as they all flow and connect together so well. Beautifully penned my love!  [This message has been edited by Dulcinea (09-20-2002 01:44 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ShadowRider~ Wow ! Absolutely fantabulous !!! Let me see that card ... your talent is showing ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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