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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-09-19 07:07 PM

So I hear the bells.
Egression's lost song.
Light's parabola
finished all but one.

Summer is a light
extinguished by fall.
Learned from springtime's else;
from learning winter's else.

Self is but a breath,
erred lines of the heart
latched onto a freize.
Forgotten who you are?

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-19-2002 07:18 PM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2002-09-19 07:10 PM

I must admit, I am always awestruck by your brilliance and your style...
just one critique...summer's light never to be extinguished...only colored mellow by the fall. On the other hand...
ThisDiamond

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

2 posted 2002-09-19 07:11 PM

Doggone squirrel dude, coulda stopped here.
"So I hear the bells.
Egression's lost song"

But woulda missed a lotta other goodies.

~Ed

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-09-19 07:11 PM

ThisDiamond,
Aw, but then I couldn't write Self down the side of the poem three times.

I'm just a bit grumpy and lost-feelin' at the moment, is all. Besides, extinguishment can be beautiful -- and the seasons will always come around again, anyway.

Thanks for reading these words.

Mike

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-09-19 07:12 PM

Dang Mikey!!
You are so good!
~Smiles & Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-09-19 07:13 PM

Thanks for takin' the time to click open my verse,
Ed.

I'm in one of those moods.

So, thank you.

Mike

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-09-19 07:14 PM

Wow, thanks Nancy. (and sorry for replying to so many in a row -- I'm just hovering near the computer like a ghost till quittin' time)

Mikey

Thanks again.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2002-09-19 07:39 PM

I loved the presentation in this Mikey. Nancy said it best.....DANG your good!

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2002-09-19 07:41 PM

Self is but a breath,
erred lines of the heart
latched onto a freize.
Forgotten who you are?

Self times 3 or 3 views into the layers of change that make who we are, an ever morphing collection of thoughts and feelings, either way it works....

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2002-09-20 01:03 PM

Thank you both. And Ron, yes, that was my intention ... the words might be a bit too humble to pull it off, though. Oops.

Mike

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

10 posted 2002-09-20 02:57 PM

**sighing**
Sometimes..yes...
lovely

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2002-09-25 07:13 PM

Thank you,
Siofra.

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