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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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The dreams come and go, amidst the town buildings, I walk down a street among faces I dont know, In a familiar city that doesn't exist, I knew my way around. These people were my friends, knew them I did. Yet when I wake up I realize we never met. I swim in water, yet I remain dry, We played in the dark warehouse pool, Surfing upon the intangible, I hear my old songs, for they'll never die, I tumble through this reverie without asking why, Inside a dark warehouse, this pool of dry water rests. Life is a lonely journey to, and a heavy-hearted departure from three words. I LOVE YOU |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome Cold hands means a warm heart |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
Surfing upon the intangible, I hear my old songs, for they'll never die, I tumble through this reverie without asking why, Inside a dark warehouse, this pool of dry water rests This is deep. Your poem has very mystical ambience. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Mystical ambiance? I can't beat that, so I'll settle for telling you it was a wonderful poem.  Kielo |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
loner, sparkles, kielo, thank you for reading. this was actually a dream I had years ago... one of those vividly remembered ones that leaves an impact of wonder I have sent you nothing but angels, and I have placed nothing but miracles before you. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
this reads like a dream would be experienced. I think you've done a wonderful job with it. I can never capture them like this. I love this. *Jenn* "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sometimes we dream of things and can never quite capture them the way we saw them, but you have done an absolute wonderful job with this! If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yes what they all said I agree! you painted this picture well in my mind..can you say goosebumps!? If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
its funny .. i can still remember tidbits of this particular dream that i forgot to mention.. at one point me and my "friends" were in a parking garage and then there was a large rectangular mirror and something sprfaypainted on it.. ohhh whatever that was so long ago |
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