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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2002-09-17 02:48 PM

I see God’s been painting his bathroom white.
He’s left half a thumb-print on the pale sky.
I guess we’ll call that ‘moon’
until he has time to scrape it off.
And look at those cotton-balls
heaped around the edges of the horizon.
So untidy.
He could have put them neatly
in a box,
but no, he’s ‘busy’,
so he kicked them all up in piles.
Sigh.
Our glorious Creator,
so much like my Dad.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-09-17 03:00 PM

This gem just popped right out of the blue!
I wasn't expecting this! Very creative and I like how it ended with a twist of lemon!

~ appreciate your tongue in cheek ~
EA

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-09-17 03:03 PM

Beautifully written

Cold hands means a warm heart

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

3 posted 2002-09-17 03:13 PM

EA, thanks! Glad you liked it.

Loner, thanks a bunch!

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

BlueEyes
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since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

4 posted 2002-09-17 04:36 PM

very nice imagery... paints a nice picture in my head...

Thanks for sharing.

BlueEyes

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2002-09-17 04:37 PM

yep...funny how the things sometimes viewed as not quite finished or cleaned up can be the ones we find didn't really need to be..
enjoyed the read and the thoughts..

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

6 posted 2002-09-17 05:52 PM

BlueEyes and CPat, Thanks loads for reading and commenting. I'm so glad you liked it.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2002-09-17 06:35 PM

Enjoyed this! Well done! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

8 posted 2002-09-17 06:57 PM

This is totally precious, Nan... I especially loved the ending.

~ poetic hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

9 posted 2002-09-18 03:19 PM

Thanks, Chris!

Hi, Lyra! I'm glad you liked it. I smiled while I wrote it. The moon looked so much like a half a thumbprint as I walked around the park, I had to write it to myself all the way around.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

10 posted 2002-09-18 07:09 PM

I love this!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2002-09-18 07:22 PM

(smiles) Oh my gosh, I too love he ending so so much, it made me smile just thinking of God sharing His love with us all then He got tired and just kicked the stars and moon across the skies before He went to take a nap and that is how our night skies came to be! (sigh) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

12 posted 2002-09-19 10:05 AM

Dear Hoot-Thanks!

Dear Noah,

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

N orth Carolina Girl
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 962
NC,USA

13 posted 2002-09-20 10:22 AM

Nan,

Now this was cute!

Juanita
"Live,Love and Laugh"

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

14 posted 2002-09-20 11:04 AM

Juanita, thanks! It's good to see you. Have you just wandered over or do you have a poem in here? Guess I'll have to look.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

15 posted 2002-09-20 02:12 PM

Pilgrimage~
Twi-of-night lover that I am ...
I greatly enjoyed the imagery in this piece~

Fantabulous !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

16 posted 2002-09-20 03:33 PM

Thanks, Marge! I was walking around the park and saw the moon and the clouds and had to write it this way.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

17 posted 2002-09-20 06:54 PM

Pilgrimge - Such wonderfully descriptive phrases and I just loved the ending!

tee~hee

Hugs, Marti

Every now and then take a good look at something not made
with hands -- a mountain, a star, the power of the ocean.
There will come to you wisdom,

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

18 posted 2002-09-21 12:18 PM

Thanks, Marti!

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

mycafe
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since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

19 posted 2002-09-24 01:32 AM

sweet...sweet...sweet...

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

20 posted 2002-09-24 04:04 PM

mycafe, thanks!

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

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