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Don't hear what I say
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Don't hear what I say |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
Don’t hear what I say I know I upset you Forget my words to you I promise it’s the last time I will let your life be happy So ignore my silly words I know that I hurt you So don’t hear what I say next time Secretlife, (Easy come,,Easy go) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I wrote today about being silent yet in the eyes you can see what you don't hear... Don’t hear what I say I know I upset you Forget my words to you I promise it’s the last time I will let your life be happy So ignore my silly words I know that I hurt you So don’t hear what I say next time I would use some punctuation because there is one line I could read several ways... I promise it's the last time I will let your life be happy I would put a period or comma after time. Or a break in the stanza...just a suggestion M |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like it Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Night Shadow Junior Member
since 2002-08-04
Posts 41 |
No body can be sad from u, sweet angle.. So just Smile... Night Shadow |
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