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To Scythe The Vine Of Life (Sonnet, of sorts)
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To Scythe The Vine Of Life (Sonnet, of sorts) |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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I lost a part of me, my soul that day upon the sweep of scythe of reaper’s dance. As death in silent creep did come, not play, if but one could be gave this life a chance. I’m bound by blood, by bone and dying cell to fall before the tree is grown to be. Till soft the whisk of death will take, foretell and then the breath of last will come, you’ll see. But when the soul is strong and bends to wind that brings to age the body in recline, a sturdy frame will carry beyond and fend the reaper’s scythe to leave the flowing vine. As time releases life and pays the dues a reaper swings the scythe and makes the news. [This message has been edited by Magnus (09-14-2002 11:32 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  Wow!!! Oh my gosh, this is a wonderful sonnet, I love it, you describe and detail the barriers between life and death and being and not being so well here, one can contemplate and relate to your words always so well, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
WOW...I'm in awe Magnus...now this is one I wish I had written. So beautiful!!!! DeaDiAmore |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
myomyomy... one of my favorite forms, and the use of internal rhyme to make this musical form sing---truly excellent work here Mag. I applaud. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Noah, I have to exercise my sonnet mind every once in a while... Dea....sorry dear one, practice and ye shall become a sonneteer!!! Sy, my friend...a compliment...surely taken and savored...thanx... Karen/Ser. Pleases me to know that I have given you a piece of poetry and it has been given your praise... thank you... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is beautiful, Magnus! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling heart and painter of wisdom’s beauty once more your writing is simply stunning. Your ability to speak with powerful persuasion with words dipped in poet’s translucent thought is so beautifully displayed here. Always you uncover the thought, and shading it in the perfect hue you frame it and then hang it high for us all to see. In the who of you I see Wisdom that reflects what will be In life’s knowledge you’ve walked far And you know all of what you are Looking in the soul of this I’m reading the intended kiss The touch of truth that fills me With your hope and your poetry On your journey into sighs Lift my soul into your dream’s skies Let me listen to your soul Learn what it is that made you whole Touch the thought as it forms there Believe in trust and learn to share Truly superb writing, you know that your writing fills me with awe, always your writing is awesome, and this is utterly utterly perfect. I’ve been really busy the last few weeks but I try to pop in here to visit you, you are always worth the effort. This sonnet carries within it such a plea of loss is one of your utter best and I applaud you for it, I love it utterly  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this Barry!! ~Hugs~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...Once time did give the life and pay the due then one will smile of strife, when born anew. ... I so dislike when my brain burps and I read something here that was not put, but still, may I share, for perhaps an inspire? ...When time did give its life and pay with dew, then one will smile through strife, when born anew. |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
Wow, this is great. Very well done. Thank you for sharing. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This may not be a sonnet in form but it is definitely a sonnet in spirit. Deep, deep thoughts and perceptions. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry You are magnificant in this! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Touching and soft Barry. Simply beautiful |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You do have a way with words! Oh, yes, indeed you do. Very well done! Earth Angel |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well penned, Barry. Sonnets are difficult to master, and, from what I can see, the meter, flow, rhyme and message are perfect. I applaud your talent  Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Barry...A wonderful sonnet. You have added to my limited knowledge of writting. Thanks...Paul |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy my dear....you write the most beautiful of words, whether in your poems or just your posts to me, to others as well...Will you ever run out of ink? Oh, I surely hope not... Sue....thanx dear lady...appreciate your remarks.. Nancy....hugs bunches.....and I wish I could make it that font size..... KJ/Sun...you were right, I didn't like those two lines initially either....just didn't work together well....should have just sat on it and walked away for a little while... Anywhooo, I fixed it....sort of a compromise... Thanx SunnyOne... Miah, thanx much, pleased you enjoyed.. Keth, I went on a Sonnet search the other day about rules for sonnets..... If I did everything they say I am supposed to and everything they say I am NOT supposed to... Well, I don't think I will be ready for a true sonnet any time soon.... Martie, hugs dear one, thanx much... WR....good to see ya back on the pages... and thanx much... Miah, thanx dear one for your comments... pleased you like this.. EA....thanx Linda...and thanx much for all your help in our duet and posting comments. You do that very well.. Melissa, I think I came closer to the true form and composition of a sonnet with this one than I have on any of the others I have written.... Which numbers only about 10 or so... And I know they need rework to make the message jump at you as well as the conflict in the third stanza or quatrain.. Paul, believe me if I tell you I am far from educated about sonnets...If you want to get educated, see Nan...she has all the hot scoop...knows her stuffsssss so to speak.... |
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