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Open Poetry #22
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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace
0 posted 2002-09-12 02:09 PM


This


I drank
the rain of you
felt you
in your pour
soaked it straight
to my soul
absorbing each drop
and wanted more
you stream
in a flow of grey
water’s sweet
butterfly kiss
your liquid
touches everywhere
my dry sustained
by this
© Copyright 2002 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
EarthenSoul
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since 2002-05-30
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1 posted 2002-09-12 02:24 PM

"felt you in your pour", "My dry sustained by this"  Oh such great lines!  The ending especially.  Very sensual.
the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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2 posted 2002-09-12 02:35 PM

I love it

Cold hands means a warm heart
Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2002-09-12 06:51 PM

yes...your style and choice of words again makes the poem live.... I enjoyed
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