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sometimes, rhymes, are just too much
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sometimes, rhymes, are just too much |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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oh the day the towers fell now I am to wax profound? YOU want politica to tell... How does one start to write the sound? IMPACT dust--fire--dust-- where are words for such a sound? A double Hindenburg in bust-- towers rabbeling to ground. Steel and glass became repast of those in chuckle-- "allah praised" now it's time to move-- and fast their demise in toast of raise sands in smooth of hour's glass... we were sold a dream of gold-- oh-we-ate-the-opiates oh-behold the-stories-told protected by the Roman's fate. And now we can pretend to know the story of what happened since. We wrap our ribbons round the trees light candles and we light incense. Someone? Tell the history of how this story came to be... Tell us how the oil ran deep tell the secrets of the greed-- how we sold a loaf--leavened-- and had to fight ourselves--AGAIN. Tell them, that we sold our men and women in the desert sand. Spin it up real good and then? Paint it up in ribboned strand of the ole red white and blue... my god, I wish this wasn't true... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well...I guess it is really clear I'm not running for miss congeniality...sigh...I just wanted to add a different color candle to the light of understanding? Nancy? I wave to you a UNIVERSAL FLAG. peace. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A very impassioned piece of writing!----very thought-provoking as well. You tell things the way you see them. I am always interested in your perspectives and how you view the world. Earth Angel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, I understand all you say and have no answers. But your write is excellent. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I was going to ask that this be deleted for fear I only added to the pain....never my intention, m'friends. I lost friends too. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
You in no way added to the pain. This a writing from the dust of what once was and obviously a pained write as well. An incredible poem and one you should be proud of. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sen, There is sentimentality, and there is understanding. I wish you were working for a major TV network. *hug* Mikey |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
This is a voice, and voices, all voices, must be heard. That is the promise. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
to the heart of the matter farther than most want to tread |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
you mentioned Rome, well Rome has moved west, but oddly enough though Rome fell while Nero fiddled it rose again in more than one place very thought provoking lines in your work here I wish there was no reason for any of these 9/11 poems to even be, let alone hold truths in them, sharp, painful truths Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
it's all about greed it's all about oil and soon they'll be bloodshed on yet another soil??? if the US invades Iraq, i will hide my head in shame you said a mouthful here, harpo |
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geenabee Member
since 2002-09-10
Posts 59NC--USA |
Truth in its most pure form and a plea to know--TO KNOW--the whys the reasons... as maniacal as they are... We pine for sanity amid this heinous fallacy of fervor. Who ever heard of the deaths of so many bringing about anything but towers of grief! This is the poem that should be remembered. These are the concepts that should be SHOUTED from the top of the Empire State Building!!! glad, so glad, to read ya, GB |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
GREAT WORK!!!! Enjoyed very much. DeaDiAmore |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
My God, I wish this wasn't true... Well done, m'dear.... |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
I'm glad that you've left this post up. I appreciate your honesty! This is a work to be proud of. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
k, thank you (this still burns too white for me to touch . . . maybe one day . . .) e |
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