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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2002-09-11 01:16 AM

undertow

I am drawn
drawn to the air in your breezes
to the spaces you keep
to the words you speak

I have only to begin
to think about you
to feel the sweet tension
the nearly forgotten presence of desire

I am drawn
drawn to your siren call
to cross wide sandy beaches
to reach your watery depths

I have only to feel
the swell of the rising tide
to smell the salts of your ocean sea
to know that I am coming home

I am drawn
drawn to the rhythm of your waves
to the crash of your rolling breakers
that will soon wash over me

I have only to be surrounded
to let you overwhelm me
to be sucked down deep
into your undertow

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[This message has been edited by Krawdad (09-11-2002 02:03 AM).]

Krishankins

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since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

1 posted 2002-09-11 01:45 AM

Nicely done!! I love the rythm of this one, Krawdad!! It makes me want to go out to the beach and watch the waves.

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2002-09-11 02:00 AM

Makes me want to go sit on the beach and listen to the crashing surf.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

3 posted 2002-09-11 01:15 PM

Superb metaphor!

a wonderful read, so uplifting in its own way! I guess exhilarating.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

geenabee
Member

since 2002-09-10

Posts 59
NC--USA

4 posted 2002-09-11 01:49 PM

thanks krawdad
i feel like i want to be the ocean,
so powerful in her magnetism
and so unerringly beautiful
as you have expressed here

glad to read ya,
geena

EarthenSoul
Member

since 2002-05-30

Posts 163
WA, USA

5 posted 2002-09-11 02:33 PM

Absolutely beautiful. It flows perfectly, like the in and out of the tide. Brings to mind wonderful sunny visions. Thank you!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2002-09-11 03:19 PM

Oh, my goodness---'tis such a deliciously, sensuous metaphor!

---I am ocean, hear me roar!

Earth Angel

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2002-09-11 03:31 PM

Beautiful, sensual write!
Enjoyed so much today.
~Hugs~

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

8 posted 2002-09-11 04:07 PM

Thank you all for reading.
This started out as an "adult" piece but seemed more comfortable this way.
And I needed something comfortable for today.

"Grab a pen, grab some paper, do yourself a little favor." e

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-09-11 08:31 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love the sweeping feel of this, these words are touching, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet E.J, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

(God Bless America)

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

10 posted 2002-09-12 08:02 AM

...left breathless here...helen

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

11 posted 2002-09-12 09:31 AM

And I am drawn to your poetry of the sea. Loved this!

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