Open Poetry #22 |
Autumn Walks |
ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
"Autumn Walks" From break of day till sunset, serene Up from the blood the harvest moon Bled across fields with orange sauce As a sun rests on horizons unseen. Autumn walks crunch under summer anarchy; Nature's palm strokes her brethren's cheek. 'Twas that blustery day when birds hide That spoken winds call in coquettish whisper. Oh, change of life, change of season Brings me to knees, to teach us of reason Putting thanks in smiles on sad face Building memories that time can't erase. In the mockery of the silence of woods Among the still of green canopied hoods Is a natural cradle for small sons of God As they wait for new seasons to burst forth from pod. (In response to GreenEyes' challenge for Autumn poetry. Hope this fits the bill!) [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (08-16-2002 08:30 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I too feel a little bit sad when the summer changes to autumn, but yet I also feel happy because each season has its own blessings and I love the colors of the trees and all I really miss is the sweet singing songbirds and flowers! (big hugggssssss) This is such a gorgeous poem and the artwork fits it perfectly, sweet friend, I am a big fan of your wonderful poems, God Bless You, I hope you had the happiest birthday, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Golly gee whiz! Thankx Noah! Still tinkering with that middle stanza, and experimenting with some cadences. I kinda like the nonrhyming middle verse, and then i kinda don't. If you have any thoughts on it, let me know, will ya? Muchos gracias on the Birfday wishes: it was all i dreamed of...and more! jeff |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Ooohhhhhh...by the way, I added you to my MSN Buddy List, I would love to chat to you soon, you can contact me at [email protected]! Have a wonderful evening, I'm off to watch the Elvis movie marathon! Yay!!! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Noah, b4 you go, i don't keep my IM's much up anymore, but if you email me your phone number, i will give you a jingle somenight. Have unlimited minutes on my cell phone long distance. Love to chat wit' ya, too! Sounds like a plan, Stan! and Noah/Elvis has left the building. . . . |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
In the mockery of the silence of woods Among the still of green canopied hoods Is a natural cradle for small sons of God As they wait for new seasons to burst forth from pod. ------------------------------------------ What can I say Jeff...this is magnificent! I especially like the ending here. I would say challenge more than well met! ~Hugs Nancy~ *and btw, couldn't help but overhear your conversations with Noah.... you have such a kind and loving soul* ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You met the challenge well, Jeff... The poem is beautiful and autumn is my very favorite season. The best time for acorn gathering. ~ hugs from a nutty munkser Lyra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Jeff, you never fail to leave behind a bit of you in your poetry...I can see you falling to your knees, listening quietly to the reasons that are... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
In the mockery of the silence of woods Among the still of green canopied hoods Is a natural cradle for small sons of God As they wait for new seasons to burst forth from pod'' this exploded off the page, with such a stunning beauty....lovely Jeff.... thank you for sharing..... Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ShadowRider Good job, enjoyed picture and poem. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
You have reaffirmed my reasons why Autumn is and always has been my favorite season. And if it's possible to not see enough beauty in the colors outside all one needs to do is read and see your poem. Thank you, SR. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling heart, this has to be one of your utter utter best, when the flow is as smooth as water over glass, when the phrasing is as delicately meshed into the whole as to make the mind sigh, when the touch of the words falls in a soul with a velvet touch, then I know I’ve read something special. This fulfils the promise of beauty that is offered by your name, when I see your name I know its quality. THIS Is simply superb writing, and I love it utterly utterly utterly. Stunning image superb writing it had to bear YOUR name Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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