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Midnight after Green
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Midnight after Green |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Give me stars, let them spill from your palms, between your fingers, in bars of blue and red evidence pure; Through smoked glass midnights coil -- descending to dusk I stood in circles of light casting shadows in white arc in contrasting oils black masks dangled like bats earthbound from tin roofs {haunting really} I took from wells landscapes of water -- spiral sunsets reaching outward in delicate brushings of southern winds here Dwelling in abstract pictures, earth trembles rain of green, tapping buildings of stone {between acts you described, sipping wine & stained plums -- for the Eden of 'wildlife' by a glass wall} Each day the same, I stood, again beside you; carried you in slumber of small songs and dreams: laughing {Heaven paused for reception shaking seas fire and steel beginning long nights} This canvas needs more veil there is nothing; no middle candles melt slowly the moon; no where in sight I again stood in corners of horizons watching petals fall illuminations in exact shades weightless through open night ~~~~~~ From the Poetry Workshop The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-14-2002 11:18 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
~ Absolutely exquisite Lauren ~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
damn you are good. dang you are good. (g rated version) enjoyed it lauren |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Give me stars, let them spill from your palms, between your fingers, in bars of blue and red evidence pure; Lauren, when you write, your images come to life in my mind........and they are so beautiful.........  somebody tell me, please help me.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren Your writing is magical...in flow and thought, delightful. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've only read this about ten times, each line a little differently each time...each wend of thought a little differently than before... but each time, each time...knowing it is a  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
It is so good to read your words again. And this poem is as magical as the others I remember reading not long ago. Smiles from Kacy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wonderful words, Lauren. Sandra |
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Magician Member
since 2002-08-14
Posts 126 |
Ok, I am hooked...I wish I could write like this. Looking forward to reading many more. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwww, I just love tjis, sweet friend, this is breathtaking, your wonderful words always make me smile and portray the night crystal-clear! (kiss on cheek) You are a delight to us all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - how do I comment to these, as I have said all that I know. You're one of the best... BC |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
weightless through open night J' |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Give me stars, let them spill from your palms, between your fingers, in bars of blue and red evidence pure; Through smoked glass midnights coil -- descending to dusk I stood in circles of light casting shadows in white arc ================================== This canvas needs more veil there is nothing; no middle candles melt slowly the moon; no where in sight I again stood in corners of horizons watching petals fall illuminations in exact shades weightless through open night ======================== With every write your poetry evolves... a more exquiste depth of ethereal ... a more enchanting essence and a higher level of inspire... as if you know the secrets of the night sky...as if the stars have whispered them to you and now you write their legacy. I feel humbled and grateful to get to read them.  If all the tear drops went to heaven |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
LittleL' I wanted to do an edit on what I said before or copy and pasted I did not have much time then but needed to say I think you are so talented and so "thoughthful" you know luv ya dear J' |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is perfect, Lauren... I love the way you just let your thoughts flow and somehow...they come out as gorgeous poetry.  ~ warm chipmunk hugsLyra copyright2002 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (08-15-2002 11:56 PM).] |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
An elegant song of sensuality! |
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Gabriel Frost Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 216Between midnight thoughts |
Beauty, true beauty. |
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