Open Poetry #22 |
Sherry......rewrite |
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
We got to know each other by fortune my father her mother and fate they were older lovers seekin marriage we were thrown together that way and I got to know her gentle beauty cause I got to see her everyday and though she was my stepsister I knew I'd never be the same So I told her what I was thinkin and she stared at me cool and hard her wide eyes circled by her golden hair thrilled me as I spoke my part chorus: "Do you think this is wrong Sherry Do you think that I'm outa line I've fallen in love with you Sherry seems nothin's gonna change my mind" Well she walked away from me slowly but she looked back from the stairway gave me a quick grin and crossed her arms I thought my beatin heart would break And I froze as she kept lookin at me The air became solemn as a wake I said "I know we ain't kin and this ain't a sin" Lord she never had a thing to say. chorus: "Do you think this is wrong Sherry Do you think that I'm outa line I've fallen in love with you Sherry seems nothin's gonna cahnge my mind well we finally got round to talkin she took my hand and said she knew she had studied my eyes when she passed close by they'd given her more than a clue said she'd shared a fire with a college mate but he'd run off with someone new so she came home to her mother's arms I'd have to wait till the pain subdued chorus: "Do you think this is wrong Sherry Do you think that I'm outa line I've fallen in love with you Sherry seems nothin's gonna change my mind" The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssss) Oh Eric, this is a wonderful re-write, I can understand how hard it must be to lose someone so young like that as I can never imagine losing my angel Joanna, this is a compassionate song of love waiting to grow! (sigh) I love it, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Interesting story, well told, I like the way you left it, with tender hope. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Beautiful song Eric. Well done Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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