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Down with Damons Darkness
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Down with Damons Darkness |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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Three days they figure he had hung before his brother found him, my Irish cousin Suzies son, three day more police impound him. The ruffled white silk casket lid contrasts olive head and hands, tis here we meet alas, amid all the Loved ones his death strands. Shock and shame's the Mothers toll, I view the selfish carcass which smote the body, maimed the soul declivitous its darkness. Tis lifelong guilt the brothers fee his legacy for caring, did Damon think that he'd be free and not this pain be sharing? Where'd ya see lad you would go once yer candle dimmed to smoke? Was yer darkness deepened so that you thought its gloom you'd choke? Damned ye now eternal hell where in Minos tail you'll wring and curl your shade e'er to dwell seventh circle, second ring. Masks we use for Love offcast bare only two true faces, God and self, this hope once passed are just nouns death erases. I know well that bleak canyon, I've watched its walls arise where boundless pain abandons unheard ya think all cries. Forever hear yer Mothers howls your requested music bled, there rooted in the hopeless bowels some crap by the Grateful Dead. And while I share depressions chain I viewed you with distaste, Your lasting impression's pain what waste, what waste, what waste! "Happy people have no history" - French Proverb [This message has been edited by RSWells (09-09-2002 11:19 AM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
And while I share depressions chain I viewed you with distaste, Your lasting impression's pain what waste, what waste, what waste! I could feel the deep sense of loss and the horrible tragic waste this is in your words. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Intense. You write so well of darkness. I could feel pain, frustration, and disgust through your vivid imagery. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A powerful write, a painful read, but oh the aftershock....*silence* now from me. |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Very strong and stinging! Incredible display of emotion. Harsh, but just. Good write! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This poem is not only a strong, dark piece but it depicts in the truest form, how some feel when someone dies that wastest their entire life being the way they were, and how it affected others. Wow Richard, this was truly an excellent piece of poetry and I loved the chosen dialect you used as well. Of course, the rhyme was sublime as usual. The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Richard Depression steals the ability to see beyond the self to the waste and the pain of a foolish act. With a bitter tongue you paint your feelings so well. |
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