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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-09-08 09:28 PM

Dipping beneath the moonlight's whirlpool
rushing endlessly in a midnight stream
muscles tense and relax,

easing into the flow.

Sensations pulsing from the warmth that steams
with each fluid movement and simple touch of hand
stirring my breath unevenly,

playing misty in my dreams.

Pouring out desires that spill below the surface
delighting my senses that swirl in liquid contrast
soaking in the pleasure of each jet releasing,

sluicing through the center of my being.

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-09-08 09:35 PM

playing misty in my dreams.

I like the construct of this poem. Really different and you did it so well. Enjoyed!

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

2 posted 2002-09-08 10:01 PM

I have not felt that way in a long time nor have I been able to conjure up such wonderful images..loved it..

Kristen

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2002-09-08 10:03 PM

I just love it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-09-08 10:08 PM

(smiles) Oh Lori, this is absolutely beautiful, sweet friend, I know this dreamy feeling too and how it deeply touches the heart, this is excellent, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2002-09-08 10:22 PM

"sluicing through the center of my being."
You always paint the coolest images!

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

6 posted 2002-09-08 11:43 PM

Sometimes raw is what we need.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

7 posted 2002-09-08 11:48 PM

Sensations pulsing from the warmth that steams...

I love this whirlpool of a poem, Lori...

~ hugs from a whirling chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2002-09-09 12:07 PM

You swept me into a whirlpool of passion with your writing.

Well at least tonight I'll go to bed and have pleasant dreams!

EA

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

9 posted 2002-09-09 01:09 AM

Lori,
I wish you this and so much more! But couldn't have expressed it half as well.

Lovely as always.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

10 posted 2002-09-09 01:41 AM

Lori,

it's so wonderful to see your beautiful
words once again...this is just so lovely
my friend...

"Pouring out desires that spill below the surface
delighting my senses that swirl in liquid contrast
soaking in the pleasure of each jet releasing"

I could never compare to the piece of
heaven that youve written here, so I
just sit in envy. *smiles* beautiful
write!
take care
amy

"if irish eyes are smiling...they are probably up to something" :)

chitsank
Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 88

11 posted 2002-09-09 01:50 AM

A very lovely poem.

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