Change (First legit sonnet attempt)

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Open Poetry #22

Change (First legit sonnet attempt)

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2002-09-06 09:44 PM

Sometimes in life a man must change his ways
from what he once had known himself to be.
For fear or time or circumstance we stray
ourselves into someone they'd like to see.
They say be true to self and you will find
a confidence that only some have known,
but change of self mirrors a change of mind,
and change of mind accompanies the grown.
Yet when my mind is filled with thoughts of you,
and all the love you feel for me as me,
I know that I myself must see it through,
And as a man remain who you now see.
Though time and place may try to make anew
I'll fight to stay myself and stay with you.

I'm on my feet, I'm on the floor, I'm good to go
All I need is just to hear a song I know

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2002-09-06 09:54 PM

I like this, Kevin, especially that last line! Great!!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-09-06 09:59 PM

(smiles) Yes, every man must change his ways every now and then but always be the sweet sensitive person you are and you are bound to make your loved ones happy forever as we are all so proud of you! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-09-15 07:34 AM

I hereby proclaim you legit [for as much as I know how to write a good sonnet, which I don't, but still, this pleased me very much!]

~ViXeN~
Member

since 2000-01-09

Posts 93
Guelph, Ont. Canada

4 posted 2002-09-15 12:28 PM

How do you do it?
You amaze me more and more everyday.

Now come online!!!! I need you!!!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2002-09-15 12:32 PM

Kevin, there are only few here at PiP who
can probably bless a sonnet for what it is
supposed to be...Though I can write them,
I do not consider myself a master sonneteer.

However, I will say you dun good...and just
keep on doing it...

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