Art...Senryu ... Changed it :-)

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Open Poetry #22

Art...Senryu ... Changed it :-)

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-09-06 10:56 AM

Thank you Interloper. I kept going over the other one after changing it so it was correct in number and I just didn't like it anymore.

I hope this one is better. I feel like this artist now

Struggle with canvas
the artist bleeds a picture
pain of birthing art.

WhiteRose

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (09-06-2002 11:47 AM).]

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

1 posted 2002-09-06 10:58 AM

Still wonderful! The second line supports the last one better, in this one.

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2002-09-06 11:27 AM

I love this one as well ... even better. Yet it is still a Senryu .. and a beautiful one

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2002-09-06 11:32 AM

Yes, it is a beautiful senryu.
Art really can bleed the essence of the soul, through the canvas.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-09-06 03:44 PM

(smiles) Oh my gosh, though I love the first one so much in the first place, this one is wonderful too! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, w eall love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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