Open Poetry #22 |
Autumn Sits on the Corner |
Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The rains have returned, After summer holiday Of grasses brown burned, Reservoirs almost empty, And dusty long days. The nights begin cooling down As green spreads across the ground. Trees drink the sky tears As warm play ends for children, Hair cuts and clean ears They return to class again To harvest learning From ancient books and teachers As the year turns in colors. Skies are softer grays, Crystal blue and clouds fluff white, Skies of shorter days That rush quicker into night Over color change Trees tinge with yellow and red Preparing colorful shed. The rains have returned, As warm play ends for children, Skies of shorter days. Gloom This is a format found in my research, which I’m not sure is an actual format and I don’t seem to find a name for it, but it recurs often with minor variations. Choka stanzas ending in a Haiku made from each stanza. This poem would be a single, but three more Chokas and another Haiku could be added. Actual lengths of the Chokas doesn’t seem to matter (I picked all mine of seven lines), Just the theme should be about one subject. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Professor Gloom---Masterfully done! I'm going back now to read your words again! Linda |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Earth Angel, Pleased you enjoyed, I have been working on my web site, So you might wish to check that out. Alternate forms has a Japanese form section . Gloom |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write Gloom... Enjoyed this format so much! ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Prof. Gloom - this is very unique and enjoyable. Nicely done indeed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
dearest dark one...your shadows crawl to places beautiful...helen |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Professor Felt in rhythm, almost like a song. Lovely! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Enchantress, Pleased you liked it, just something I found will scanning poetry From other sources, looking for a touch of inspiration. Thank you, Nightshade, Glad you liked my humble words. Thank you, 1slick_lady, A shadow can creep anywhere, it’s the noticing that matters. Pleased you enjoyed my sight. Thank you, Martie, I couldn’t tell by the references, but it might be a song style, Especially the multiples. Your words are insightful and kind. Gloom |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
a very intereting read indeed. And a familiar topic too. Got one buzzing around inside my head from 22 years ago... gonna post it soon... when I can remember it all. Thanks for the reminder. Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Skies are softer grays, Crystal blue and clouds fluff white, Skies of shorter days That rush quicker into night Over color change Trees tinge with yellow and red Preparing colorful shed. Being a sky watcher I enjoyed this very much. I've painted many skies and have yet to capture the beauty God creates with a simple brush stroke of nature. Love this poem Gloomy The White Rose~ |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
oh this is so the right poem for me to read tonight, am going back to school tommorow, anyway never mind I really enjoyed this, thankyou, anya |
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