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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-09-03 01:54 AM

I do not know how to write
the color of your changing eyes
with pronounced consistency
the lyric proving artistry
of words you sing
in chant to me--
the colors of the crown
bursting
into halo right above
the thorns in forehead
dripping blood,
turned crystaline
of pain's amend
thorns in head
of path
~ascend~
sweating tears of blood
sincere
transformation--
pain to love.

Down your cheek
and kissed by me--
just one moment's
alchemy--

don't they taste of diamonds now?

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (09-03-2002 03:48 AM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2002-09-03 02:22 AM

Interesting imagery here.
Tears of blood becoming tears of love....becoming as priceless as diamonds.
"sweating tears of blood
sincere
transformation--pain to love"

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

2 posted 2002-09-03 05:19 AM

serenity...Very touching, what more is there from tears of blood to tears of love, beautiful words to remember...Paul

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-09-03 08:34 AM

the colors of the crown
bursting
into halo right above
the thorns in forehead
dripping blood,
turned crystaline
of pain's amend
thorns in head
of path
~ascend~
sweating tears of blood
sincere
transformation--
pain to love.

Down your cheek
and kissed by me--
just one moment's
alchemy--

don't they taste of diamonds now?
=======================================

Your poetry is of diamonds.....
I have always said when you are well inspired..you write like few ever hope to.

In the space between now and then
I lost the fire, lost a friend
and Ill never be the same again
Still, I believe in the innocence
we gave away.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2002-09-03 10:40 AM

serenity

wonderfully sincere and loving look.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

5 posted 2002-09-03 01:50 PM

diamonds, yes
you are crystalline
faceted dance
at the heart
of a
mountain
the pulse
of
earth

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-09-03 01:55 PM

Does this mean you're using literary kicks in the butt? (you, only, will understand what th' heck that meant)

By the way, one time I wrote a poem where one of the lines was "Does it taste like diamonds or blood?"

We're close.

Mike

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

7 posted 2002-09-03 02:52 PM

Tears of diamonds.... wow, Karen...
Those are mighty expensive tears, y'know...
So I hope you don't shed them often...
The poem is lovely...

~ hugs of diamonds and tears

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

8 posted 2002-09-03 03:49 PM

This is very nice work...I enjoyed this very much!!!!

DeaDiAmore

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