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Holding In
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas 
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Damming up the river Won't stop the water's flow For when the concrete fails It drowns the town below your 100grit love is smoothing my soul |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
When my father passed away last year, I held in the tears for so long because I was afraid that once they started they might never stop. Same principle here, methinks. (and by the way, I was right...the tears almost drowned me...) smiling, so few words produced so much thought. I'm enjoying yer work much. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
And the concrete always fails at some point in time... *don't I know it*  As always, yet another lovely write within short lines... *As to your critique question- why ruin a good thing with excess??? Short and to the poignant point... like it lots...!!! Much love !!! (go ahead n laugh)  Devina Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (06-24-2002 05:57 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I agree, many times...a short poem, well written can be as spectacular as any poem that is four times as long and good... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Great imagery and truth in only four lines.... Excellent!!! enjoying your work  Maree |
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