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Dip into a Memory… |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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I dip into a memory- (stale and slightly hurt) of unpardonable silence- surrounding life’s concert… I shake the sweat- from trembling hands, less I drown before I understand… You told my eyes- of compromise, said some things are better left alone… felt the lie twisting insides- marked question in your tone… Asking of her memory- (the one that came before me) You shied right by my scrutiny- knocked instead (upon a door) of clarity… Silent battle reigned in time- (you then drown me in detail) Cringing then, my hopeless find- Realization that I’d failed… Currently- I’ve been informed, (due to my reckless nature) of romantic past adorned within her perfect stature… I know not what would have been- Had I never let you in… Creeping you inside of me Now all is different in love you see… Childish, yes that I may be… still silently- I condemn the one that came before me… Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (06-23-2002 08:00 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssss) Oh Tanya, I'm so very sorry about what lied in your past, sweet friend, keep your chin up now and look ahead, for there is much promise and all that obscurity will disappear and your memories will become crystal clear, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tanya, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
ya know, i hate to say this, but I know the feeling. I liked this a LOT!! More coming I hope? Krishankins your 100grit love is smoothing my soul |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Interesting format.....very well done!  God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Never fun having to be second, when you are supposed to be first.... I have to tell you that you write quite, quite well. And this poem is no exception. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Never fun being the second... (or third or fourth or ...) But I mean the second big love. There's always a presence of the first hanging around... Very good poem. Feel my angsty reachiness! |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
I could feel a tint of frustration and resignation in here. Truly enjoyed ! mycafe |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Just wanted to let you all know that I was overcome with "memory" last night...After all this was the past, not the present... never fret...this girlie is still *smilin* with penetrated love... MA- I know what you mean...i need to just *let it go* but ty all the same sweetie!!! Krish- I think we all have, glad you can relate to night time struggle... Lizy- what a doll you are to creep in here...and unannounced even...!!! *big grins* for you lady!!! Magnus- and I have to say that YOU are a dear man!!! And don't worry sweets...I am first and always these days...but blast the past!!! (as they say of course!!) Anvrill- Know what you mean sweets...thank ya much for poppin in with the epitome of "hangin presence"... mycafe- Ah! you've read me well and I thank you for that!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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BrandeeM Junior Member
since 2002-05-01
Posts 45 |
I've been here...glad to know you are so happy now... and the format and scheme here- WOW!!! |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Another gem from you, memories are teasing things that keep us up at night, eh? All too often I regret the mistakes of past and am ever thankful for the present. Perhaps poor decisions turned out with present pleasings: *waves at Caiya* |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wow! I enjoyed the write ... a lot. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
devina Every beginning is a new beginning. Enjoyed the clever write. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This poem kept calling me. And tonight (while listening to Alien Sex Fiend, no less), I gave in! Glad ah did. And I know, I know -- I need t' start writin' in Adult again. :p These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun. |
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