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To Dwell o not to Dwell
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To Dwell o not to Dwell |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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To Dwell or not to Dwell Upon a flying carpets climb I dwelt upon a muse’s time And flew within a foggy head To catch a butterfly to wed My eyes stayed closed on imprecise They ached from watching paradise And would not see reality Nor free the hand of ecstasy Edging on aggressions mood Not quite dressed and not quite nude With pressures, that it stay in tact In hopes that it would stay its act Alas alack illusions snack Born within a dreamer’s sack One that I will truly miss The essence of a steamy kiss And now the acid sun has come Dissolved the night and I’m undone. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (06-11-2002 08:28 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My eyes stayed closed on imprecise They ached from watching paradise ================================== Edging on aggressions mood Not quite dressed and not quite nude With pressures, that it stay in tact In hopes that it would stay its act Alas alack illusions snack Born within a dreamer's sack One that I will truly miss The essence of a steamy kiss And now the acid sun has come Dissolved the night and I'm undone. =============================== Sy-babers there are so many clever, subtle lines of imagery dressed in wit, angst, and truth in this oh so cool piece. I love the ethereal, melancholy mix of analogy to fantasy and ecology...and that closing couplet's impact and imagery is poetic genius and is the humanity of the poem. Once again I say...I do so enjoy seeing things thru your eyes of wise. "With pressures, that it stay in tact In hopes that it would stay its act" that kind of sums it all up...dont it.... yer so kewl     |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hey Morning Sy! I didn't miss my morning read today... Because I'm on the right page! (Open 21, right?) LOL...hate when that happens. This is wonderful with a touch of fantasy. Enjoyed...enjoyed!! ~Morning Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You will never be undone, Sy. NEVER! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
See? When I get here after JM, there're just no words left to say...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, If I ever get to put together a small book of my humble poems I would you please write the preface. Sy-babers there are so many clever, subtle lines of imagery dressed in wit, angst, and truth in this oh so cool piece. I love the ethereal, melancholy mix of analogy to fantasy and ecology...and that closing couplet's impact and imagery is poetic genius and is the humanity of the poem. Once again I say...I do so enjoy seeing things thru your eyes of wise. Dear Tink, you are the sugar of my day. Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky. Enchantress, So glad you enjoyed. Interloper, Thank you kind friend. Sunshine, There is always sunshine left. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
SY~ very tender....most loving....  Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, Thank you for the read and sweet comment. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy--It is always such a pleasure to read your poetry...the book of poems sounds like a great idea! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Thank you sweet, but this old man moves like a turtle. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy I’m completely awed by this delight. Oh how you write, and how much I love it when you do so. Once upon a dreamers thought In drifting bliss my breath was caught By a whisper murmured low I slipped into your souls warm flow Without fuss I’ll meekly cede To let you plant this poet’s seed In hope’s dreams this is true That dreamers fill their heart with you This is utterly utterly divine. Purely magical darling boy, utter bliss and I love it utterly utterly. This is why I seek out your writing you are just exquisitely fine, your writing is quality. And I utterly utterly love it  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Vandana, Happy you enjoyed. Marsha, You warm the cockles of my heart. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hmmmm... JM said it all... and Sunshine beamed her warmth... what's left for a suthern gal to do except just enjoy? *G* And that I do, Seymour... that I do. *S* This is excellent. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Thanks for the rewarm. It's always a pleasure to read your comments. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . to enjoy. . . you make it so easy to do Sy. . . great work. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sven, Thank you my friend. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I believe to dwell within dreams is the most wonderful and free feeling of all and only there can we do whatever we want, whenever! (big huggssssss) This is wonderfufl, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What Janet said exactly! She's so cool with those replies isn't she? Another lovely trip through thoughts and dreams Sy.....a very enjoyable read! |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Hey Symour , I hope you keep finding more dreamy treasures they bring your poems full of pleasures Hope |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Glad to see you posting again. ethome, Yes Janet is cool she is my Tinkerbell. HopeS, Thank you sweet lady. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And the wit and freshness of your talent goes on and on. ( undone or not ) Maybe we should all look into being undone a little more. It sure as heck seems to be working for you. Excellent writing and I have said it before ... if you find a Sy poem, then you won't EVER be disappointed. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Bravo.....like the rhyme of this...and the ending couplet sealed it perfectly.. Thanx Sy... |
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