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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Time to take brass ring hand in hand time to get off the porch (I know I whined, incessantly about being here but now that I look around it really is a nice, harmless porch real shady and cool so, nevermind I’m fine here) time to move off paper to the bar thank god, for alcohol trying to translate where before there was no language barrier how is it distance bore a dream reality must hold time to stop asking have I found the key to the heart you guard so vigilantly time to act someone’s going to need to remind me to breathe Forgetting all I'm lacking |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) And now you will be reminded by us all again: YOU ARE A WONDERFUL AND LOVING PERSON AND WE ALL LOVE YOU SO MUCH FOR WHO YOU ARE!!! (big hugggsssssss) Now get off that patio and come dance with joy, sweet friend, this is wonderfully heartfelt, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so sensitive, Duncan....even the porch part... Are you really going to get off that porch? I guess its getting kinda hot to be sleeping out there...and the thunderstorms and all... I vote for getting off the porch for now... But you did write a very beautiful poem !  ~ hugs for a porchsitterLyra |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Duncan, I love your words My favorite part?"how is it distance bore a dream reality must hold" You blend so perfectly... how do ya do it? lol. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
how is it distance bore a dream reality must hold Oh Duncan, so very deep these words tonight. ......Hugs, well written stuff here. I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
time to get off the porch ============================ how is it distance bore a dream reality must hold time to stop asking have I found the key to the heart you guard so vigilantly time to act someone's going to need to remind me to breathe ========================= Thats my job... breathe baby...and then INHALE  No more moth lectures...no more pep talks... time to push ya out the moth nest..push ya off the porch... Ive told ya before... heart on sleeve sincerety is all you need... besides...youre a poet...how can she resist ya Have a great time you two...relax .... breathe......... Breathing Lifehouse I'm finding my way back to sanity again Though I don't really know what I'm gonna do when I get there Take a breath and hold on tight Spin around one more time And gracefully fall back to the arms of grace Chorus: 'Cause I am hanging on every word you say And even if you don't want to speak tonight That's alright, alright with me 'Cause I want nothing more than to sit Outside Heaven's door and listen to you breathing Is where I want to be, yeah... Where I wanna be... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is deep but great work. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Keep breathing, it will be ok. I like the nature of these poems, so much like having a little chat on the porch with you. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
In.... out.... deep.... shallow.... breath... then foot forward... steady... pull other foot forward... there you are walking breathing living again.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes Duncan...time to get off the porch and breathe! Wonderful write as usual! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Amazing title. It's so very Robert Smith.
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Here's the one I was looking for when I stumbled upon your door! It's easy to get comfortable on that porch, in my case the patio, or where ever we go that makes us feel at home. how is it distance bore a dream reality must hold I liked that verse too~ Candid and direct with just the right touch. How do you do that anyway? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Love the message....sort of goes hand in hand with getting off of the pot.... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i especially love this line: "someone’s going to need to remind me to breathe" enjoyed! hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'how is it distance bore a dream reality must hold time to stop asking have I found the key to the heart you guard so vigilantly time to act someone’s going to need to remind me to breathe' These definitely are great lines, Duncan...and getting off the porch is the hardest part, I understand that...great style...I really enjoyed it... sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
(I know I whined, incessantly about being here but now that I look around it really is a nice, harmless porch real shady and cool so, nevermind I’m fine here) Great writing PoetFriend... Smiles2u *~coco~* |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Just a quick note to say thanks everyone for the support and encouragement. I highly recommend getting off the porch! Forgetting all I'm lacking |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Do you remember writing this: I am better on paper And part of my response was: (and somehow, though your writing is wonderful on paper, I think you'd be better in person ) Damn, I love being right!! Lol. time to stop asking have I found the key to the heart you guard so vigilantly Don’t know how you found it, but glad ya did darlin  (and yep, thank god for alcohol…cept when someone spills it all over their pants  Everything is possible in the game of life (Simple Minds-Promised You a Miracle) [This message has been edited by Tracey (06-23-2002 07:42 PM).] |
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