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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2002-06-21 08:04 PM

Sweet Release

Sometimes it is so hard to say
what lays behind the laundry
and these darn old tennis shoes
but I want to dangle this anyway
by the shoestring that is hope
and walk across the rope
into dainty slippers pointing out

But when I play it
I find I am walking backward
away from the blossoms
and the garden is fallow

listen I will tell you
as this fly crawls across the screen
dissecting my thought
with feet that have been
in God knows what obscenity

I will tell you
that I watch the sky for comment
and see it implode
like reverse gravity
and I want to be sucked in
in to this vortex
and take this ambiguous feeling
and throw it to the core
to a place where I have never been
where there is a cavern
and the echo of my voice
saying yes yes yes yes yes

but it is so far
and there is no map

So I walk on grass with bare feet
and wait for the gardener
to rake up all my thoughts
and pile them into colorful
so I can jump into their center
and toss them into what for
and then lay with them in sweet release
_________
10-00

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-06-21 08:07 PM

(smiles) Oh Maetie, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I help a beautiful carefree smile reading this, sweet friend, what a wonderful feeling it is indeed to fly free, we all love you so much! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2002-06-21 08:08 PM

Stunning write Martie, so well expressed, so deep. PERFECT!! Nobody releases the way you do lady!

I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (06-21-2002 08:44 PM).]

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

3 posted 2002-06-21 08:08 PM

fine writing and thanks for sharing the release - we all need that once and a while - Paul

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

4 posted 2002-06-21 09:15 PM

So I walk on grass with bare feet
and wait for the gardener
to rake up all my thoughts
and pile them into colorful
so I can jump into their center
and toss them into what for
and then lay with them in sweet releas

You make life sound so intense, Martie...
Intensely good that is!

I enjoyed your release...

~ hugs of release

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2002-06-21 09:55 PM

Martie~

*Marge just SMILES SOOOOOOOOOO BIG*

Love this~

'Sometimes it is so hard to say
what lays behind the laundry
and these darn old tennis shoes
but I want to dangle this anyway
by the shoestring that is hope
and walk across the rope
into dainty slippers pointing out'

You go twinkle toes !
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-06-21 10:08 PM

quote:
So I walk on grass with bare feet
and wait for the gardener
to rake up all my thoughts
and pile them into colorful
so I can jump into their center
and toss them into what for
and then lay with them in sweet release

I remember...

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

7 posted 2002-06-21 10:09 PM

Enjoyed this a lot.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

8 posted 2002-06-22 01:22 AM

So I walk on grass with bare feet
and wait for the gardener
to rake up all my thoughts
and pile them into colorful
so I can jump into their center
and toss them into what for
and then lay with them in sweet release
_________

And this is why I never worry about whether or not you will make it through the day. You know the answer to the riddle and you bring your understanding to us in such a beautiful way.
Big hugs to you sweet one.

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

9 posted 2002-06-22 02:26 AM

Martie,
This feels so familiar . . .
That yearning to meld oneself with something, or everything, or anything, or . . .
I enjoyed the feeling and your craft of it.
e

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

10 posted 2002-06-22 03:11 AM

this is very nice. Kinda of a good piece of advise for people in despair. Keep on writing. You bring light on all of us.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

11 posted 2002-06-23 12:34 PM

*exquisite* loved the scenery here!
That is some pen you have Martie girl!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

12 posted 2002-06-23 12:44 PM

Martie,
A lovely write and a lovely read.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2002-06-23 05:51 PM

Oh yes, yes YESSSSS
Can I have what you're having?

I love this Martie, excellent write from you hon.. as always

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

14 posted 2002-06-23 07:32 PM

And such a wonderful feeling it is...as only
you are capable of expressing so well..

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