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Tones of the City 1 to 5
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Tones of the City 1 to 5 |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Tone 1 Man pillars reaching First to touch the morning Last to touch the evening. Tone 2 Dusk dark and twilight Window shine to the night Shadows cast by their light Tone 3 Fast rolling black street Flashing by not to greet Friends lost and not to meet Tone 4 Sunlight shines bright yellow Pushing back the night shadow Flashing on high rise window Tone 5 Pedestrians in crossing Intersection of pausing Interruption of flowing Gloom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You've been painting again...smiling, loved the play of light and shadow on this skyscape...at first I thought four verses made more sense---but I like the five...man in stand against the shadow symbolism. Hmmm...well, it's what I saw in each "frame" anyway. morning, gloom... enjoyed. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you Serenity, Pleased you liked, more of a chord than a painting, Each part a different note, strummed together like a 5 string banjo. Gloom |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent snapshots of a city, Professor... I particularly like the 4th because I watch it every morning. *S* The refracting rays show the architect's intention... not just office, but art. *S* |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  YAY!!! Oh Aszard, I love this, sweet friend, I love the form of this and how each line corresponds and rhymes at the end! (smiles) I knew the first parts were there somehow, guess I won the scavenger hunt finally, YAY!!! (big hugggsssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aszard, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You have painted the city well Gloom. As inviting as the city might seem at times, I guess I would prefer to be a country gal all my life. Good write. I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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