Open Poetry #21 |
Sleeping Beauty...reposted by request |
Balladeer
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Another day has come and gone. The moon is in full view. I lie in bed and marvel at The beauty that is you. I touch your cheek with gentle hand, Smile as my fingertips Trail slowly down to rest upon The fullness of your lips. Angelic in repose you are. Your face sets off a glow That only lovers who can give Their all will ever know. Your eyes, your ears, your nose, your lips Your cheeks, your brow, your hair Combine to make a masterpiece I find beyond compare. Although your face in stillness lay I see it as you smile I see it as you face the day In your own pixie style. I see it as you frown at all Injustice you may find I see it take angelic tones When you're just being kind. I see it as the teardrops fell When sadness came to call I see it pensive, lost in thought, I see it rise and fall. I think back to the golden days I thought would never pass When fingers slid down silky skin Instead of hardened glass. Our lives were filled with memories Impossible to keep. I gently lay your picture down And cry myself to sleep. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
I am so glad someone requested this repost - such feeling and such depth of emotion and such power - not a dry eye in the crowd - thanks Paul |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is an awesome poem, Michael...and I was very surprised by the sad ending. I have been through that very feeling and it hurts so very much... ~ kissing the owie away Lyra |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You should always repost your favorites, Balladeer, whether by request, or not...they are always hits! And they most always wrench the heart...you never write anything that doesn't have impact, and you do it so very, very well...thank you... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Beautiful and heart touching. Sandra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Awwww, come on 'Deer. You are not playing fair at all....This is too good, OK? And I want you to tone it down a little bit... Seriously, Mike...this is superb, and I very much enjoyed it... |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH This was just beautiful. Tear jerking, but beautiful. To bad my machismo want let me shed a tear. Garfield |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome and Beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Michael, this is so very beautiful but all so sad, sweet friend, I know how you feel because I am in love with the most beautiful girl I could dream of, Joanna, and we may see each other this summer but yet I am worried I may not get to see her somehow and I know if I don't get to I will feel so heartbroken because I love her so much! (sigh) I hope everything is alright now and true love fills your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart what can I say except this is awesome in it’s beauty and power this is definitely one of your best, truly utterly wonderful. Superb writing with utterly beautiful lines of wonder, as always darling heart when you write the universe stands in awe and reads the words of brilliance. There ought to be, by rights, a by-law on the statue books of PiP’s ordering you to repost at least three classics a month. That way we would have beauty revisited on us often and wouldn’t have to seek it out. Not that seeking it out is a chore it’s not but I’m sure I’m not the only one who loves the immediacy of the current forum. You know this is utterly utterly perfect I love it love it love it, beautiful writing as only the master craftsman knows how. Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Balladeer
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Goodknight...I'm glad you enjoyed it, Paul. Madame C...I thought of you when posting this. I know you went through it. My owie feels better already Sunshine...and I thank you. Reposts are necessary through these museless days Sandra.....very kind words...I thank you Magnus...tone it down? I never learned that routine! Glad you approve, good sir! Garfield...good to see you again! Hey, machismo is over-rated!! loner_23...I thank you for enjoying... Noah....hang in there. If it's meant to be, it will be.... Mushy girl...I always feel funny about reposting...don't want to bore people but I'm glad you approve...you did like it, didn't you? |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awwww Balladeer! This is soooo sad. Please don't cry. Sending BIG HUGS to you. |
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my3monkeytoes Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 152In the Carolina Breeze |
This is so very beautiful. Makes me think of a Nicholas Sparks book. I could only hope to be the subject of such a story some day! Thanks for reposting! ~Sydney McLean |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*smacks* my hubby for the beauty of this... you are exceptional in this Mike... beautiful with sadness, as everything seems to be eventually... repost to your hearts desire sweets...you know I miss alot- being in baby wars n all...*G Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
The beauty of your poetry sleeps no more! What beauty can a heart display, but wonderful words written from your poets pen! ~LOVELY~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Our lives were filled with memories Impossible to keep. I gently lay your picture down And cry myself to sleep.'' very tender..... I have been here too many times to count.... thanks for reposting.... Lauren~ Its been a long road |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i never read this one before i danced to it though and you brought back the memories looked up the original post a month before or so it's all a poem or so they say i still believe in the ballet (wonderful writing, michael.... as aways....) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Michael This is a real gem of a poem full of reminiscing nostalgia and so well structured so as to capture the reader's atttention. That ending got me right in my old blues heart! JUst a marvelous read! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Denise
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Posts 22648 |
Another of my favorites! Excelent writing, Michael! (As always) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
May I say...each time I read your work now, I feel I am in the room with you as if you are reciting it and it makes the experience of your craft so much more wonderful Michael. As it was with this piece. It brought a tiny tear, as I could so relate to a picture in my room of a dear friend, and I too say goodnight to her and go to sleep each night. There is nothing means more to me than |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I loved it the first time and I love it now again. Just beautiful Deer. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Balladeer
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Smartchick....no tears here...just a pome Sidney..we'll all be the subject one day. Thanks for reading... devina...LOL! Those baby wars are tough! Thank you, sweet lady.. A Romantic Heart....WOW! it's WONDERFUL to see you again! Welcome back! Greeneyes...thank you...and don't move away!!!! Doreen...I thank you.. ethome...blues hearts are very susceptible to poems like this....I know James MIchael...thank you, sir Denise....I MISS you!!! Mysteria...yes, I understand that you understand....thanks for taking the time away from e-bay Titia....wonderful words from you...thank you! |
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andEmmamakes3 Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 66Kent |
’Deer hi there again, this is so beautifully written, and I hadn’t read it, like mum I think there ought to be a by-law that requires you to re-post at least three a month. How could reading you ever bore anyone? If they were I’d seriously doubt their intelligence. Truly, they wouldn’t be in here reading and replying if their judgement were that seriously impaired, so re-post please. There are a lot of newbies you know, but the ‘old timers’ who’ve been here a while would welcome the chance to read them all again. Of course you might ask how a relative newbie knows how the old members would enjoy reading you over again, and I would reply, I know quality when I see it, and you write quality. As this is and everything else you’ve ever written Emma Eternity, stands laughing at old time |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yanno, Deer One... I wasn't here for the grand opening of these blue pages... but I moseyed in as fast as I could waddle. *G* And I've been known to lurk around your website and the archives... so I don't think I've missed many of your masterpieces. *S* That was just the prologue... I'm just getting started. LOL I don't think I've ever quite understood the concept of reposting by request... for if someone is requesting it they obviously have read it and can read it in its current location. *G* That said, there are poems that should be posted again based simply on their merits... and almost any one of yours would qualify. *S* These forums move much too rapidly for us to even keep up... a new person doesn't stand a hope of having time to go through the archives, digging for treasures. *S* And even the most loyal of us are going to miss something, no matter how hard we try not to. Conclusion (Yeah, I do eventually wind down *G*) When you think it's time to bring one out for another round, please do so. And if you need a specific request, could you consider this an ongoing one? *S* Excellence is welcome at any time... I have favorite books I revisit often and never tire of them. I'm still waiting for your poetry in book form (hint, hint *G*)... but it qualifies for that category. *S* Epilogue... I love this poem... and wouldn't have had to write nearly as much if I hadn't been sniffling... *S* (There's logic there... somewhere. *G*) |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California |
Balladeer Another that touches my |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Hello Michael, Guess what.... I signed in today! And the first poem I read was this one... and I think it's beautiful... I love the end... even though it's sad... Love Light and Happiness.... Neeraja |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
dont let your heart die. Remember, you are still a child |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
balladeer you never ceast to amaze me. Good work brother. Just remember, sex is overrated. It's the trust that counts. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Awesome! You are some writer! Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
OH Dear me Balladeer I just got a sudden chill these words are so moving and filled with so much feel. Once again your pen amazes me with such emotion from your pen and I can't help come back to read over and over I read again. So promise that you'll never quit writing your awesome words for you truly have a gift the kindest heart I've ever heard. LOVE THIS......so glad it was requested and reposted!!!!! I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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Balladeer
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Emma....ok I will. After words like that how can I say no? Suthern gal...LOL! Still the fastest fingers in the west, I see! Thanks, sweet lady. I accept your ongoing request to bore readers with twice-told tales. You packed yet?? Martie...then it's the poem that's the fortunate one. thanks!! Neeraja...wonderful to see you!! You'll not find a nicer group of people than we have here and, after having read your poetry, I'm sure you will be very welcome here! Eagle Scorpion....how right you are. Sex is always ever-rated....trust never is. Thanks for reading... Kethry...thank you!! You're pretty darned good yourself, you know? Gentle Spirit....I promise! Thank you for responding poetically...that's a wonderful compliment and I'm very glad you enjoyed it. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
As always beautiful, touched my heart...thanks for sharing it Dear Deer ((hugs)) Charisma btw...a thread goes to my library |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Packed? *G* You mean I'm supposed to bring CLOTHES???? LOL My insecurities and fears are ready and raring to accompany me... but they don't need a suitcase. *G* |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Fabulous! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Awww, Deer! This makes me want to give you a hug! Cor p.s. love this pic of you. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
You've penned a true gem Balladeer... Thank you4this enjoyed read... Smiles2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Balladeer indeed. This is the lovliest poem I think I've ever read. It made me want to weep. (sniffle) no, I'm not crying...(sniffle).. I have an eyelash in my eye...really Wonderful your 100grit love is smoothing my soul |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I know this one sure made me sleepy....LOL |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
’Deer hi there, I may be last of the clan to reply but I’m not the least. This is really amazing writing, you have such an ability to paint the scene. I could tell you that this had me crying and it did which proves what an amazing writer you are. And I add my request for re-posts frequently, if you do need a reason, you shouldn’t but if you did, you could say that its because now I have to share this with Emma and Mum I miss so much, and I haven’t got time to root around the archives. any excuse So please re-post as often as you can. You do know this is really superb writing don’t you? I hope you do because it really is Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Ah, Balladeer, This is superb! I'm trying to catch up on all your poems (set myself a 10 year time line). Sunshine specified this one as a terrific read. She knew what she was talking about. Thanks for the referral, Sunny One... And thanks to you 'Deer for a beautiful poem. Shenachie |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Michael-Absolutely awesome. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Our lives were filled with memories Impossible to keep. I gently lay your picture down And cry myself to sleep." Sometimes all we have are memories and pictures ... sigh .... Beautifully woven Michael ... just beautiful! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
and I'm actually speechless, this is so beautiful, so touching, such superior writing! Take care m'deer, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
So sadly beautiful |
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