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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Petals  Petals fall softly each one dropping, stripping away dignity lands upon the ground crumbles, seeds blowing away carried upon winds of destiny drifting to another time another place.. The stem yet standing among remaining petals SCREAMING to regain beauty once held within, never gaining knowledge, that beauty, although faded in time does not die but is regained in the future, nourished by the brightness of light. The beauty has not died~ it has simply moved on to new life. I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) Hey LC, thanks bunches!! [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (06-18-2002 10:26 AM).] |
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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
I like this. The extra words in there that seem to be irrelevant actually tie in to the subject nicely. Well done! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
I really liked the way you said it and the way you formed it - Paul |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
i liked it  |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Petals fall softly each one dropping, stripping away dignity lands upon the ground crumbles, seeds blowing away carried upon winds of destiny drifting to another time another place.. The metaphorical use in this is splendid. but is regained in the future, nourished by the brightness of light. The beauty has not died~ yes, the spirit needs light to lift it, for rebirth. I hope I am reading this correctly with the intend you meant. This is what I see, and it sure looks beautiful to me. Thank you. |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
A dozen hidden nuances in this gorgeous poem D, simply magnificent! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
The poem and the picture are both reflections of you beauty of thought, Donna.  ~ hugs of petalsLyra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo lovely, sweet friend, this reminded me of blowing dandelion seeds, wherever the wind carries them, the seeds will grow new life somewhere else! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
Deep stuff Gentle Spirit. The presentation along with the metaphor is so good. *s* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Good morning hugs and thanks to all.  SE, I thank you for seeing not just the words but the intend behind it. Lyra, aww......your a sweetie, hugs to you. To all of you, you are so appreciated thanks.....peace to all. ~D~ I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Thank you GS. I am still learning about metaphors but I think using them is cool. *s* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lol at SE, so am I still learning how, every day is an adventure.......thanks.  I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (06-21-2002 12:53 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is lovely, and has lots of meaning. Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisite!!... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
again I send you all hugs for the wonderful words you leave me........HUGs........... I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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