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miasma of dawn |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you are miasma of dawn with words scolding winds trickle as syrup to archipelago vasty they wait with heavy boots to run we are Galofaro in vortex dance our maelstrom is reverine as gazelle I pant with smoke dry whispers your eyes are droughty to tear hear Shawondasee strums weathervane edge and woolpack clouds are the music we sing of the yao and epoch times til dawn's daughter is vestibule of day are kiss mouths are gloss glaze gloved ©Dark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
DS you write with such fabulous metaphors! This is a real classic poetic presentation. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
miasma droplets form salty life perspires... wake up everyone...DS pens again... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ethome..thank you for that comment... was foggy here so it just slipped out..(grin) ms sunshine, hi coffee friend lady..hugs and a decaf? thanks for the sweet touch babe |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mmmm, yes...and good morning to you too Dark! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my oh my...this is a delightful "poetic assault" on all the senses... Sensual sensory overload  Your vocabulary and verbiage is most impressive in this DS... very very cool write of sights and sighs You ... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
thanks for the great read - Paul |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Enchantress...Good Morning ms enchanting... thank you for eyes and smiles and sighs JanetMarie, bless you poetess for your venerate replete of gracious reply Humble thanks Paul for your reviews [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (06-18-2002 09:31 AM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Especailly liked the glossy glaze~ Would make for a nice dream! Looks good on you DS~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ok ok, I'm awake, coffee in hand and damn the Dark one has done it again. beautiful metaphors with passions undertones..... each days just a bit better when I get the chance to read you my friend. Morning hugs coming at ya...oops....better go get my robe on before I hug ya.......lol..... I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS What wonderful words...wanted to read aloud, but had to whisper instead in this sleepy house. Hugs across tall buildings! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy  |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
there you go again..making me wander thru your forest....love the wordplay here. Lots 'o' hugs to ya. There's the man I chose. There's my territory.....Shakira |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Bluezy, thanks babe, for the glossy reply, hugs to your thoughts Donna, hmmmmm robeless hugs are so tempting...thanks hon for the read and touch Ms Martie, high waves over the back fence...nose prints on the glass too..thanks lady friend Vandan, humble thanks for the read and review Phachi, warm hand hugs to you ms, slow warm hands..you treat me so nice thanks |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I pant with smoke dry whispers That line is amazing..well..moreso than the others to me. Feels very Bogey to me. If that makes any sense. You smooth another morning right out. Sincerely, Reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Regina; Yes I do get the Bogey view, and it feels good to smooth your morning hope the aftermorning is like greasy glass thanks for the touch |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Reading you is like taking a little journey into your mind, always fascinating. Sandra |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Sandra, through the glass of my eyes and the cellophane walls of my thoughts welcome to you to drift there thanks lady |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
~Keep reading your words, not only these, but in your other posts as well, I find your use of language and construction of thought admirable. I'm hooked you see. *Peace. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms alicia you bless me with your eyes thanks to you I hope to continue worthy thanks ms |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oooohhhhhhh...I'm so happy I found this, you always bring kaleidoscope eyes to every sunrise here on Passions, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggsssssss) This is a true keeper, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Noah, thak you my friend |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Noah, thanks my friend for your gracious reply |
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