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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Drawn into the fold around the neck lace line wrapped up in you around the heart of me silk slips on lips in the warmth sunkist a place to dwell in the real you sea a four letter word a heart beat at risk an open space if you care to be but without the pulse flowing through the veins and the constant rhythm of a beat to keep is a failed attempt a restless sigh a pitter patter half a love alive..... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bluezy...that pitter patter had me squirmin for a bit...but then i realized it was your heart not the feet of a hundred pound pitbull.. enjoyed you |
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elfin_tigress Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 101Someplace |
Awww! A very nice poem. I like how the stanzas are so small, just tiny bites for us to understand before we try to move on. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
a wonderful pitter patter of feelings and thoughts - thanks - Paul |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Nothing to squirm about, somehow I can't quite picture that! Nice try though~  Thank you stranger~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Morning elfin~ thank you for leaving such a sweet reply to my little nibble of a poem. I'm not always sure where I'm going with my poetry but I'm happy you enjoyed where it ended up this time. Thank you Paul~ |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
The style and presentation precicely match the message, very well done Lori! Excellent! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very nice, I like the thoughts here, well expressed, too. Sandra |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love your little pitter patter of a poem, Lori...  ~ pitter patter hugsLyra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ You captured something very special in this penning~ It breathes .... *sighs*~ Lovely ...~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Ahhh, exceptional write! A bow to you poet! ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) YAY!!! Oh Lori, this is such a beautifully exceptional write, sweet friend, the metronome of a lovers heartbeat is the assurance that it will always last forever, for if it beats unconstantly, it is really onely half-beating! (kiss on cheek) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Is love floating on the wind? sure seems that way....hugsssss you.... Lauren~ Its been a long road |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You got the message across well in this and the emptiness of feeling incomplete in love creeps deeply into the reader's mind Good work! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Sometimes the quietest sounds can be heard for miles!! Thunder catches you off gaurd, traffic endless ... but the two things I find most deafening are teardrops and a single heartbeat. I liked the presentation here .... your words are resounding ... an echo of your feelings. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're so sweet! Thank you Dulci and hugs~ Thank you for saying so Sandra~ It's nice to know you were here and that you enjoyed what I had to say, I mean that! Hi Lyra~ I prefer a drum roll myself and the anticipation of it all! warm hugs and thank you~ Margie~ Thank you for hearing me...no sense in dancing around the subject, long as you can catch your breath and keep love alive. That is the general idea right? Thank you again~ Thank you Diamond Lady I am much obliged to you, and just a little caught off guard by your gracious reply coming from someone who writes so well. Thank you muchly~ Noah~ Half a heart will miss the beat every time I would say. Thank you poet sir~ I appreciate your kind thoughts. Lauren!!!! More like drifting in and out of the clouds, always seems to be a day dream away~ So what else is new? Thanks for being here ...you!! hugs Lauren~ ethome~ Poetry is a range of emotions, is it not? I like to think when we have made our message clear then we have accomplished more than just a poem. I thank you for your knowing reply. Craig~ You are so good to me, and I am touched by your reply. Thank you for warming my heart with your kind words. I'm going to stop now before I start blubbering! |
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