Open Poetry #21 |
Darkness |
han_tigger Member
since 2002-08-10
Posts 50Thundersley, Essex, Uk |
Darkness. The man stood in the dark, Cloak as black as night, His eyes stars in the darkness. In the deep courtyard, Barely noticeable, A shadow in the night, A flicker by candle light. No more than a breath from the breeze, A silent wave caressing the shore, A mere flutter from a butterflies wing. The silent footprints in the sand, The muted passing of a cloud. He flaps his cloak, A birds wings as it tentatively flies away. Concealed in the shadows, In a blink of an eye, A feeling. The softess grass, Alike as the very air we breathe. Motionless past watching eyes, Stirring with the breeze. I perceive him there. Not quite visible. He creeps, unnoticed, His walked this path many times. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well done, Hannah, I liked this. God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
quite an eerie feel to this if you'd like help with the mechanics, the least important, but sometimes interruptive part of writing, e-mail the poem to me and I'll proof read it for you, offering my constructive critique I'm a teacher and though I don't catch everything, I have a pretty good eye and would love to take you up on your request for them Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
eerie, yes |
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