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Liquid Dreams........A duet with Mark Bohannan
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Liquid Dreams........A duet with Mark Bohannan |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Liquid Dreams Liquid are the dreams that romp within sapphire swirls Surging diamond playgrounds atop cotton candy curls Fantasies teeter on edges of merry go round harmony As romance totters between sunrise lyrics ... yet to be Sandy beach of buckets that empty on my toes Seaweed scent of air and sun tan cream to skin exposed Eyes closed the crash of mystery and majesty abound In swirl of timeless sigh hand in hand a lover's sound Diamond grains smile in cradles to soft forms of delight Found engulfed between the desires of the sun at midnight Riptides tease in undercurrents of waterslides in massage Spilling whispers of enchantment adorned in kelp corsage See how steps the seagull now in sandy look for food crossing the clean washed place where you and I once stood the time when you were just a lad with sunlight in your eyes and I was deep in heat of time for singing lullabies. I know you said you saw me out there walking on the pier My eyes the color of the tide that played within your ears You brushed by me in tender barefoot time so long ago And left a heart's impression on the sands off Coronado Mirrored memories giggle in glance of tomorrows meet Between blush of rising tide reflected in face to face feet Listen now to mood of tunes in the dolphin's serenade Singing embrace of promises two souls on this day made [This message has been edited by Martie (08-07-2002 02:14 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You and Mark are a natural. This piece could not be better. Congratulations to you both. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Brava!!! Absolutely beautiful Martie & Mark! This just swept me along and I didn't want it to end. What a wonderful duet from you two! Enjoyed, enjoyed, enjoyed! This one is a  !!~Hugs to you both~ |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
You duet so well, but when you duet with very special poets, the works become a masterpiece... Kudos to the both of you! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, I thought I had who was whom figured out and then you guys flummoxed me... so all I can say is, Great Write! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Liquid are the dreams that romp within sapphire swirls Surging diamond playgrounds atop cotton candy curls ===================================== Sandy beach of buckets that empty on my toes Seaweed scent of air and sun tan cream to skin exposed =================================== Diamond grains smile in cradles to soft forms of delight Found engulfed between the desires of the sun at midnight Riptides tease in undercurrents of waterslides in massage Spilling whispers of enchantment adorned in kelp corsage See how steps the seagull now in sandy look for food crossing the clean washed place where you and I once stood the time when you were just a lad with sunlight in your eyes and I was deep in heat of time for singing lullabies. I know you said you saw me out there walking on the pier My eyes the color of the tide that played within your ears You brushed by me in tender barefoot time so long ago And left a heart's impression on the sands off Coronado ================================ Listen now to mood of tunes in the dolphin's serenade Singing embrace of promises two souls on this day made =================================== Well lets talk about imagery overload!! This is so full of surf, sand, and sun me thinks Im even getting a tan  You guys I love this poetic dueting of rhyme divine...any time we get Martie to rhyme is a treat. This was a pleasure to read aloud...it had harmony of verse and harmony of poetic inspire. A beautiful mix of imagery, personification and kismet kissed with serendipity. If a moth begs for more duets..will she get her way? Superb seascape poetic portrait from 2 of my most fave poets. How can it not be poetry in motion.  If all the tear drops went to heaven And if all the pain was confined ... Would I be your salvation could I make your spirit shine. KWSB [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-08-2002 12:58 PM).] |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
This is just super - such amazing imagery and at every turn - I loved it - do more!!! Paul |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ok Lady and Gentleman.....kudos to you both on a truly remarkably beautiful piece of romantic harmony and imagery so very well painted for us to share... Thanx for this.... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sy-I think she is the natural...I had to actually think to write with her. Thank you kind sir. Enchantress-No end to good poetry ever as long as there are thoughts and good ink to pen them. Does that qualify for a group hug? LOL Soleil Noir-Thank you for the kudos and the kind comments and she is indeed a special woman not to mention remarkable. Sunshine-Tis both and neither ...... tis only thoughts of two wrap in one robe understand....... tis the nature of duets and the beauty of 17 words taken to the next lap in a baton changed hands.  Thanks much....glad you enjoyed it.JM-Did ya know that she can rhyme whenever she wants to ....... she just likes to make us beg for it. LOL Imagine that. You know that when ya talk imagery to me that I get sort of a tingle and being able to match imagery with one of the best for me is like a tangle of tingles to fall in dream with at night. Thanks sweetness. As for getting your way.........well, we will just have to see now won't we?Goodknight-Again I say, I am glad that you enjoyed the imagery and as for doing more.........count on it. Magnus-It is I and I am sure Martie that will thank you for you kind words and I do thank you sir. Martie-You know how special of a gift it is for me to be able to share pens with you at any time and I must say that this time was no different. Thank you for the honor and for the recall of memories from which we both shared the same wood on that pier. Life has a funny way of bringing simple glances of brush by chance into lifetime treasures to cherish deep. I thank you once again. Love ya my friend. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I know you said you saw me out there walking on the pier My eyes the color of the tide that played within your ears You brushed by me in tender barefoot time so long ago And left a heart's impression on the sands off Coronado Mirrored memories giggle in glance of tomorrows meet Between blush of rising tide reflected in face to face feet Listen now to mood of tunes in the dolphin's serenade Singing embrace of promises two souls on this day made"  (smiles) Awwwwwwwww, oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friends, this is breathtakingly beautiful, you two never fail to bring magic to these pages and make liquid daydreams come alive, this is breathtaking! (BIG GROUP HUG) I love it, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Mark and Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you both! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A beautiful write, blended like vanilla and sunshine. Quite a good team too. Topics close to my heart. Best of the summer always to both of you. ThisDiamond |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Simply beautiful, encore please. Sandra |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
For two writers, whom i have much admiration for the heart and the talent that makes words cry to be spoken: this is as pretty as any blend of colors ever painted jeff |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie & MarkB~ No way it could be anything but a masterpiece with you two dipping the ink~ Beautiful ....~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
 Standing ovation to you both! Oh, this was just wonderful! Laced with imagery to please my mind's eye ... what a wonderful collaboration, Martie and Mark! Truly enjoyed this immensely! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Superb flow and truly a delightful read. A keeper, Martie and Mark!! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Oh you two the imagery in this was pure poetic divine. This was so vivid you could see it, hear it, and feel it....... that my friends is what poetry is all about and you two definately know what poetry is all about!! Loved it. Bravo!! Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Noah---Your replies are always so appreciate...your enthusiasm for poetry and poet, make me smile...thank you ThisDiamond--I always appreciate you thoughtful replies...mmmm vanilla and sunshine sounds delicious. Sandra--Mark is so easy to write with...perhaps again. Mark? Jeff---Thank you for your appreciation. Marge--Big hugs for being you! Kit--A standing ovation...wow! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this...it sure was fun to write with Mark. mycafe--So glad you enjoyed and want to keep this...a high compliment. Donna--I'm so glad that you came along to the sand and water. That is what imagery is meant for...glad to know it worked. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Liquid are the dreams that romp within sapphire swirls Surging diamond playgrounds atop cotton candy curls Fantasies teeter on edges of merry go round harmony As romance totters between sunrise lyrics ... yet to be You two are so well matched...both of you, are unbelievable writers...and this poem is beyond beautiful...  ~ lots of chipmunk hugsLyra |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
I will have to agree with all ..it deserves a standing ovation...a superb and exquisite write...Collaborations are not easy to do and make it look like one writer..wow.. such a very talented performance from you both.... aloha, Cher Poetry is: |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
primo pens, lovely scenes... you two make music!!! enjoyed this huge |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Madame Chipmunk- Thank you so much and your replies are always just as beautiful. Btw......so cool it is that you got your own little "furry Smile". CSKpoet-She makes it easy because she is so diverse in her abilities. Thank you so much for the wonderful comments Dark Stranger-I guess we do don't we. Thank you much sir for you kindness. Martie- You betcha. Free verse this time shall we? "Thank you again for this honor" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark Free verse???? Yikes! |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Sandy beach of buckets that empty on my toes Seaweed scent of air and sun tan cream to skin exposed Eyes closed the crash of mystery and majesty abound In swirl of timeless sigh hand in hand a lover's sound
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I knew any collaboration between the two of you would be exquisite. *S* And you didn't disappoint... *S* Excellent work! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
My goodness, this is gorgeous writing! Mark and Martie, both of you are very talented, I've read this three times and each time it impresses more. This is something to be very proud of!~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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