Open Poetry #21 |
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Distant Realms Of The Future |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989![]() |
I walk this path of the yet unknown a voyage to the mystic zone. My mind plays visions of unseen into the 'morrow, I follow a dream. The places and faces yet obscure it beckons to me, I feel the lure. Held in spell of what's yet to be softly it whispers, inviting me. Mists of the past are left behind tomorrow is holding what I'll find. Journeys of a lifetime I will take cherished memories, I'll not forsake. Endlessly searching to find the dawn yesteryears faded, but never gone. Seeking tomorrow, my soul will soar into distant realms of the future... Walk with me, come take my hand travel this journey into tomorrow land. Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. {on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (08-06-2002 06:18 AM).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
There couldn't be a better partner to do so. I love your smooth rhyme in this. I hope all your days and daze are gold edged dear somy~ Sincerely, Reg |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I love the mystical, magical feel of the unknown future in this piece Gentle Spirit ... very much enjoyed! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done! I enjoyed this immensely ![]() Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I walk this path of the yet unknown a voyage to the mystic zone. My mind plays visions of unseen into the 'morrow, I follow a dream. The places and faces yet obscure it beckons to me, I feel the lure. Held in spell of what's yet to be softly it whispers, inviting me. ==================================== this poem made me think of our missing keeper of the fire..me thinks Logan would love this one... You've penned a mystical beauty here Donna... definately in sync with your pen name ![]() Tell me we belong together |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms donna you are the pilgrim with bare feet and a flashlight of wonder you will find the rainbows there enjoyed this piece babe. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
The places and faces yet obscure it beckons to me, I feel the lure. Held in spell of what's yet to be softly it whispers, inviting me. How lovely, Donna....to face to unknown without fear. ![]() Lyra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Walk with me, come take my hand travel this journey into tomorrow land." Beautiful Donna...very mystical feel to this piece. Ejoyed ever so much! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (smiles) I love this, sweet friend, may you skip into tomorrow always and find all that you have been hoping for, sweet friend, this is a beautiful time machine of a poem, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thnak you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
I've enjoyed reading this alot! mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Superb! Especially this: quote: Keep looking to the future and new dreams will await you there...loved this ~D~! ![]() |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The places and faces yet obscure it beckons to me, I feel the lure. Held in spell of what's yet to be softly it whispers, inviting me. Mists of the past are left behind tomorrow is holding what I'll find. Journeys of a lifetime I will take cherished memories, I'll not forsake. =========== These two verses give much promise as well as the awareness of it. Spoken very well here. Walk with me, come take my hand travel this journey into tomorrow land. ======================== Then after hearing your invitation......offering your own. Just as it should be. Your cadence in this piece is well refined and the flow one of your smoothest yet. I especially liked the way you softened the rhyme in the last verse before the couplet....sort of silently speaks of what the future should be in our minds. Very nice write. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
excellent ... always enjoy ones like this with good rhyme and meter ... reads nicely out loud too ![]() |
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