We Need Space Away From Each Other

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Open Poetry #21

We Need Space Away From Each Other

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2002-08-06 02:59 AM

The redness of the eyes had melted away with time
Misty eyes sometime still appear but quickly evaporate
You have been gone it seems like forever
The memory still has the fragrance of having you next to me
But the pillows will not work anymore for they have tired
Watching TV the snacks just seem to get fatter

As I fall asleep on a sofa on a regular basis
Making the loneliest part of the house the bedroom
Where the sheets are still ruffled
And the drawers and closets still see you
Having promised yourself Goodwill
But the truck never seems to appear
Mostly because you forget to call
Hoping for a miracle

We agreed that we needed our distance
That things were too hectic to handle
That we both needed space
Now space is all I have
Isolated memories wish for reconciliation
But stubbornness says no
My heart says yes and mind says no
The hate torn into love
And feelings craving release
Feeling like a two sided coin
Not knowing which way to fall

There is a loud knock at the door
Now who could this be at this hour?
You slowly get up and look at the screen
It says “To be continued”

(Continued in “We Need Space To Come Together”)

D.Lester Young (08/05/02)
Tuscaloosa, AL
Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry)

[This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (08-06-2002 08:34 AM).]

wordartist
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since 2002-08-06

Posts 6
Bahrain

1 posted 2002-08-06 04:29 AM

I enjoyed reading your poem. You reveal a beautiful sense of passion and romance through most of your lines. Some lines cut in and change the flow of the poem, and the ending wasn't fit for the poem.

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

2 posted 2002-08-06 07:32 AM

It did not end but was continued like life see "We Need Space To Come Together".

[This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (08-06-2002 08:31 AM).]

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