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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-08-03 01:22 PM

Etching Promises

I’d like to bathe
in peppermint
beside the vibrant sea
and wash away
this malcontent
that rises over me,

to listen to
the whispered wind
as breezes cleanse the air
and prop my feet
upon the sand
beside a lounging chair,

to feel the sun
upon my face,
a gentle warming glow,
and take the hours
in slower pace
with tide’s sweet ebb and flow.

would you like
to join me, Dear,
in ribbons and in lace
etching promises
so clear
with ev’ry snug embrace

©July 30, 2002

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2002-08-03 01:36 PM

VAS,
Very inviting, delightful read.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-08-03 05:59 PM

Etched in the heart,
is this one...
truly enjoyed this, Virginia...
thank you!

janmew
Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 134
Canada

3 posted 2002-08-03 06:41 PM

This is beautiful. You created such a wonderful image here, and a warm cozy feel as well.

Jan

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2002-08-03 07:42 PM

Beautiful writing Virginia. Well done.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

5 posted 2002-08-03 08:19 PM

This piece reads beautifully. The lines may be six in number but they read as 4 beautiful couplets laced together in an inviting verse. Then of course we have ...

I’d like to bathe
in peppermint
beside the vibrant sea
====================

Now that is about as poetic a line as you can get with great visuals to boot. Loved the entire piece immensely.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

6 posted 2002-08-03 08:21 PM

loved, loved, LOVED this...helen

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

7 posted 2002-08-03 11:07 PM

What Helen said . . .
Me too!
Nice one, Virginia.
Delightful!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

8 posted 2002-08-03 11:12 PM

Virgina, you have some cool lines in this, I really enjoyed your verse, especially the 'bathe in peppermint' image. You are fast growing as a poet and it's wonderful to see you in full bloom

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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