Open Poetry #21 |
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i don't get paid to do this |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
*i don't get paid to do this* I've come to impress! The one that's well-dressed, well-rehearsed and well-versed and thoughts well-expressed! I can't just let it go I gotta edit these notes... can't put it on the page 'til I've perfected these flows. And that's all you'll know... expectations or quid pro quo. "They're written without a doubt, He's not really down an' out." Another poem to please the crowd "They're just words, they're not a shout for a helping hand." Don't you understand?!? I need help to stand and to be my own man. This is what I'm like in real life. I'm real shy, and my skin is real white. These aren't unspoken words on a page. It's a showcase. It's my well-composed face. These words are what i feel These rhymes are all real. This is what I'm like in real life. I hide my identity and write these lines in anonymity. I'm not tryin to make enemies, I'm just makin sure you're feelin me. Nobody round here thinks I have a voice. Nobody round here thinks I have a choice. They think it's a joy to stuff words down my throat. I have to shut up so much that I choke. I don't like eating words, so I put my words in verse While the audience laughs at the pictures these words are worth. But this is what I'm like in real life. I'm real shy, and my skin is real white. These aren't unspoken words on a page. It's a showcase. It's my well-composed face. These words are what i feel These rhymes are all real. This is what I'm like in real life. You may think I'm just another funny guy. I'm here to say I'm just another phony guy. Hiding behind a fake name with my pen. Writing these lines on a page to vent. Pen the frustration and hope you know what I meant. Hoping you'll say, "I been where he's been." But in the end it's just another pretty poem. You'll read it alone in the comfort of your home. And you'll say, "Hey man, I like your rhymes or style or tone." On and on you'll drone but all I really wanna know Is if you feel how i feel... you know where I'm comin from? 'Cause this is what I'm like in real life. I'm real shy, and my skin is real white. These aren't unspoken words on a page. It's a showcase. It's my well-composed face. These words are what i feel These rhymes are all real. This is what I'm like in real life. it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown [This message has been edited by MidnightSon (06-15-2002 09:14 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Midnight Son, my skin is real white and I hide in fright making the rhymes to cloak rotten times so no-one will know my ebb and my flow as I write of the night while my life is a fright brother I know where it is you go when you're using your write to hold back the night don't think I don't see or have sympathy but only you know what you do and you show and when pen takes flight you write what is right. I can relate to this. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Writing these lines on a page to vent. Pen the frustration and hope you know what I meant. Hoping you'll say, "I been where he's been." But in the end it's just another pretty poem. You'll read it alone in the comfort of your home. And you'll say, "Hey man, I like your rhymes or style or tone." On and on you'll drone but all I really wanna know Is if you feel how i feel... you know where I'm comin from? Exactly, and you wrote it perfectly... I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
A very perceptive poem! Nice work! I enjoyed! Love, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Writing these lines on a page to vent. Pen the frustration and hope you know what I meant. Hoping you'll say, "I been where he's been." But in the end it's just another pretty poem. You'll read it alone in the comfort of your home. And you'll say, "Hey man, I like your rhymes or style or tone." On and on you'll drone but all I really wanna know Is if you feel how i feel... you know where I'm comin from? ====================================== I've been where you been and back again I know how you feel sometimes its all too real So we wrap it in rhyme set it free in our mind Turning words into verse ... some say its a curse. (you and I know it could be worse) ![]() "Hey man, I like your style" ![]() ya already know I dig your rhymes and many times seen mirrors of mine in you lines. Poetry lets us know were not alone. cadence cool MS jm You ... |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
kethry: sick freestyle. "when you're using your write to hold back the night" thanks for the words and inspiring verse. and for your insight. gentle spirit: thanks for readin. glad you enjoyed it. morcastlin: thanks. appreciate the comments. JM: it is a curse sometimes , isn't it? i see a lot of me in your rhymes too...it's creepy sometimes. but i'm glad it means you understand. thanks for "liking my style, man". it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
YoU arE SO gOOd ![]() You intrigue me, my friend; your poetry awakens my own! Great Write...MoRE?!?!? ~Rayne For in much wisdom is much grief |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I understand where you're coming from and know how you feel....I just KNOW, okay? Well said...very well said. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MidnightSon Keep this write and read it again in a few years. Enjoyed |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like this poem. Enjoyed! |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
Yo! That is a great rap. And I can see clearly where you are 'coming from' - Question is - Where are you going? And yes, keep them coming - just love your 'style'. Kind thoughts, John [This message has been edited by Music Maker (07-13-2002 02:45 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...and I would venture to say most of us don't get paid to do this...in many cases it would be easy money...James |
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